Problems and Solutions of Global Overpopulation

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The world is experiencing a dramatic increase in population. This is causing problems not only for the poor in undeveloped countries but also for industrialised and developing nations. Describe some of the problems that overpopulation causes, and suggest at least one possible solution.

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There are different problems that overpopulation causes in rich nations. Firstly, it is very difficult for governments to provide helpful public services in overcrowded cities. Moreover, there is generally a higher level of crimes being committed, such as drugs abuse, murders, thefts, and ect. Which that often cause by the high rates of unemployment.

However, overpopulation problems in both nations have two main solution which they are deal by governments. Firstly, the government must educate people about limiting the size of the family. For example, in China they have a policy called “one child policy” which limits the size of the family to one or two children, and this is beginning to have an effect on the world’s most crowded nation.

To sum up, if the population increase continues, many more people will die of hunger in the poor countries. Also, in rich nations, the life in the cities will become more and more difficult.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 5.0

The response addresses both required parts of the task by naming overpopulation problems and proposing family-limitation education with a supporting example. However, it is significantly under length, the second stated solution is never actually presented, and frequent grammar and vocabulary errors repeatedly obscure meaning.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

5.5

The response addresses both elements of the task with a relevant example, but ideas are only partially developed, the promised second solution is missing, and the response falls well short of the required length.

Coherence and Cohesion

5.0

There is a visible overall structure with basic linking devices, but progression is often mechanical, and passages such as the incomplete second solution and the fragmented relative clause disrupt the flow of information.

Lexical Resource

5.0

Vocabulary is adequate for the topic with some appropriate items like public services and unemployment, but it is limited in range and includes inaccurate usage such as 'drugs abuse', 'and ect', and 'in many solution'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.0

A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, and clause construction, for example 'population increase dramatically' and 'Which that often cause by', impede meaning at times.

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