Problems and Solutions of Global Overpopulation

The world is experiencing a dramatic increase in population. This is causing problems not only for the poor in undeveloped countries but also for industrialised and developing nations. Describe some of the problems that overpopulation causes, and suggest at least one possible solution.

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The world population is increasing day by day. Every country wants to have . However, this type of arranged enhancement can damage the government because the existence of more people means the coexistence of more demanding and complex issues.

This problem concerns all the undeveloped and developed countries across the world. In undeveloped countries, the situation is worse. Because in addition to overcrowding the financial budget is not sufficient to aid people and at the same time food, healthcare, education, sanitation and other shortages are incredibly widespread. In these countries, the poor underlie the society therefore the community cannot help itself.

The condition in industrialised and developing countries does not differ . The . And also in developed countries, the rich, unfortunately, are not always generous enough. Consequently, the government cannot manage to provide famine relief and accommodations for all the people who are in need of it. In this case, overpopulation causes the economics of the country to depression. And that is a thing . and the economic inflation made the lifestyle harder even in developed countries and overpopulation is one of the main reasons for that.

Because of that, some overpopulated countries such as China and India . The government an estimated number. , the government can impose some punishments the limit of having children and can control . can be a solution to the overpopulation issue.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the task by describing overpopulation problems in poorer and wealthier nations and proposing population-control policies, with a generally logical progression through four paragraphs. Its main limitations are some confused or inaccurate ideas, inconsistent use of paragraph-internal linkers, and frequent grammatical errors that occasionally strain comprehension.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.0

The response covers both required parts, describing overpopulation problems in undeveloped and industrialised countries and offering a relevant solution, though some ideas are underdeveloped or inaccurately framed, such as the claim that countries want large populations.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

Ideas progress in a broadly clear four-paragraph structure, but cohesion is mechanical at times, with overused and misplaced linkers like 'Because', 'And also', and 'By this way' starting sentences.

Lexical Resource

6.0

The response shows an adequate range of topic vocabulary, including 'sanitation', 'famine relief', and 'prevention policies', but there are noticeable word-choice errors such as 'a resounding number of population' and 'economics of the country to depression'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.5

A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent errors in articles, subject-verb and number agreement, and sentence construction, such as 'no countries want it' and 'the increasing of the population', reduce accuracy and sometimes obscure meaning.