Sample response & feedback

Owning a Home Rather Than Renting

Question

In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Annotated response

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In recent years, the number of residential property buyers has soared . In my opinion, this is an adverse development and I will explain it in this essay.

One of the key reasons why owning a property the appreciation of the price in a short period. Consequently, more people can make money investing in houses. Everyone involved in the process makes money, for example, the seller, the commission agent, , and also the buyer by reselling the property. However, there are potential risks here if are involved. This will result in impacting the global economy if people . Also, this will create a virtual inflation scenario and increase the burden on the people who genuinely need housing, and impede their growth.

Moreover, another reason is that statistically the majority of house buyers using bank loans are in their thirties or forties. They want to get over with the house owners prior to their offspring is ready for college education. As a result, they could use the house as or at least house rent payments alongside college fees.

and social status are also essential reasons for owning a house. A number of people consider rented houses as stop-gap arrangements and strive to own a house, consequently, they can live the way they want. In numerous circles, match-making is challenging if a groom his own house. This is leading to a stressful situation as people to fulfill the commitment .

In conclusion, it can be comprehended that aspirants who want to own a house for various reasons such as profit, better lifestyle, sense of ownership, or social obligation, therefore, property price is increasing. This trend would be both economic growth and individual well-being. Personally, I think this is a negative development.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The response addresses both questions with a clear negative position and several relevant reasons for home ownership, organised into distinct paragraphs. Its main limitation is recurring grammatical and lexical inaccuracy, including unclear financial phrasing and incomplete clause structures. Some causal claims, particularly the link between loan defaults and global economic damage, also need more explanation.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

TR Task Response

7.0

Both parts of the task are addressed with a clear position, relevant reasons for home ownership (financial gain, family planning, status), and developed explanation supporting the negative judgement.

CC Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

Ideas are organised into clear paragraphs with logical progression, though some linking devices are used mechanically and a few connections between ideas are loose.

LR Lexical Resource

6.5

There is a reasonable range of topic-related vocabulary and some less common items, but imprecise expressions such as “virtual inflation”, “get over with the house owners” and “insidious to” reduce accuracy.

GRA Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.5

A mix of simple and complex structures is used, but errors in clause structure and coordinated verb forms occasionally hinder clarity, including “could use… or at least avoiding” and “even their physique and psyche are affected”.