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Owning a Home Rather Than Renting

Question

In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Annotated response

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In today’s modern world, to , prefers the possession of a house instead of a tenancy. Although the prices of houses are skyrocketing, the ownership of a home, in my opinion, provides a sense of financial stability and security to an individual in some nations and thus certainly is a positive trend.

To commence with, there are many reasons why people usually have a keen inclination towards owning an apartment or a house. Primarily, as compared to certain terms and conditions in rented accommodation people enjoy living freely in their own homes. For instance, abiding by the stringent rules of the landlords as well as facing difficulties from shifting one occupancy to another which incur heavy losses to the household articles. In contrast, if a person resides in his private property, he can enjoy his freedom . Moreover, in a residential space makes a person feel more . As a result, every person to save the maximum from his income to purchase his dream house and the of being a tenant.

, this is indeed an advantageous situation because of numerous causative factors. Predominantly, while having the possession of a domestic property offers a person to grow personally and professionally. This not only strengthens a great family bond amidst the family members but also feels satisfied with investing appropriately in his house and can work more productively with a stress-free mind. Additionally, also drops significantly. According to a recent survey conducted by the Ministry of Human Resource Development (MHRD), USA , in June 2019, revealed a report about the significant rise in the prices of apartments in many countries has urged many people to buy their own apartments.

In conclusion, I firmly believe that while considering the possession of a house, the factors of stability and safety are indispensable; it is undeniable that it is indeed a beneficial trend.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the task and maintains a clear positive position, with the strongest aspect being its sustained argument and ambitious vocabulary. The main limitation is frequent imprecision in grammar and word choice, which repeatedly obscures meaning, along with some underdeveloped and poorly integrated supporting evidence.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

TR Task Response

6.5

The response addresses both questions, presents a clear positive position, and extends main ideas, but some development is uneven and the cited survey is awkwardly integrated and only loosely relevant.

CC Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

Progression is broadly clear with paragraph-level organisation, yet cohesion is often mechanical, and sentence fragments and faulty linking reduce the flow within paragraphs.

LR Lexical Resource

6.0

There is a wide range of vocabulary, but frequent imprecise or unnatural combinations such as “investing the finance” and “puts his efforts to the extreme” reduce accuracy and clarity.

GRA Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A variety of complex structures is attempted, but fragments, shifting subjects in coordinated clauses and faulty reporting structures sometimes impede clarity.