In many Asian countries, there has always been an invisible pressure put on men since they were born. , such as , having a high-paying job or obviously, owning . Because of the conservative ideology, Asians usually an indicator of prosperity and , not only for themselves but also for their families and children. Moreover, people usually want to claim ownership, and this is not new throughout human history. Take colonies, for example, people always desire something that they can have absolute control over it. While a rent house may not satisfy your demand because you have minimal rights to do anything you want with it. As mentioned above, renting a house has . Firstly, it is definitely not a long-term investment even though you can avoid mortgage deposit and other taxes, but you will be under the supervision of the landlord all the time. For example, you cannot renovate or redecorate your home at all without the landlord’s permission. Next, if you choose this type of housing, you may multiple times due to limited vacancies or . Last but not least, since the proprietor is in charge, he or she might suddenly raise the rent, and that is a really big issue when you are . , possessing a house is better than renting one. Although you may have to be responsible for repairs, remodelling , . No matter what happens to you, remember there is always a home awaiting you to come back.
Sample response & feedback
Owning a Home Rather Than Renting
Question
In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Annotated response
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Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response explains the preference for home ownership through social expectations and control over property, and clearly favours owning over renting. Its discussion of rental restrictions and instability gives the argument relevant support. However, it needs to connect those benefits more explicitly to whether society’s emphasis on ownership is positive or negative. Recurring grammatical and collocational problems, together with some broad claims, reduce precision.
IELTS criteria
How each score was decided
TR Task Response
7.0Reasons for preferring ownership are developed through social expectations, control and housing security, and the position favouring ownership is clear. The evaluation of society’s emphasis on ownership is less explicit, while some generalisations and the colonial analogy need more precise support.
CC Coherence and Cohesion
6.5The response moves from reasons for ownership to drawbacks of renting and a concluding preference, with line breaks marking these stages. Sequencers make the order clear, but some references and overloaded sentence links reduce cohesion; an introductory overview would clarify the two-part response.
LR Lexical Resource
6.5Topic vocabulary includes mortgage, proprietor and redecorate, and there are attempts at less common expressions. However, combinations such as “a rent house”, “high-tier social status” and “in the condition of insufficient finance” reduce naturalness and precision.
GRA Grammatical Range and Accuracy
6.0The response attempts varied complex structures, but control is uneven. The incomplete “While” sentence, the repeated object in “control over it”, missing article in “take risk”, and missing auxiliary in “always be” show recurring problems with clause construction and grammatical completeness.