Homeschooling versus Traditional Schooling

School versus Homeschooling Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.

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There is one view that suggests that children should be taught at home for their better development, while there is another view that suggests that it is essential for them to attend school. There are benefits attached to both views. Youngsters who go to school often develop better social skills, and they get better prepared for future jobs. On the contrary, children who are taught at home receive better attention.

Children who study in school tend to develop good social skills. A child studying in school interacts with different children. The young one learns to share things and how to work together. Furthermore, apart from the classmates, the child also gets the opportunity to interact with various people, such as teachers, workers, janitors and supporting staff of the school. This means the child learns how to meet and behave with other people, too.

In addition to the above, schools also prepare youngsters and regulations, such as dress code and timings, somewhat the code of conduct of jobs. Hence, the youngsters attending the school know well about the acceptable behavior in offices. Furthermore, they also without parents which will help them in future when they will leave their parents’ house to live in .

Those children who are taught at home benefit from getting from the teacher. These children easily understand whatever they understanding and learning skills develop better than those who attend school.

Though there are some advantages in teaching children at home, but the advantages of sending children to school teaching children at home. Thus, I am of the view that it is important to send the children to school because they will develop such skills which are necessary to survive in today’s world.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The strongest aspect is the clear, well-organized argument for schooling, supported by developed ideas about social skills and workplace preparation. The main limitation is the uneven treatment of homeschooling, which receives only a brief, thinly developed paragraph, alongside recurring grammatical slips that slightly reduce polish.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.0

The response addresses all parts of the task with a clear opinion in favour of schooling, but the advantages of homeschooling are only briefly developed compared with the school side.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5

Ideas progress logically in clear paragraphs with consistent use of linking devices, though some connectors are inaccurate, such as 'On the contrary' for a contrast of viewpoints.

Lexical Resource

6.0

Vocabulary is adequate for the topic with some appropriate collocations, but usage errors like 'somewhat resemble with', 'exceeds than' and 'proper attention' limit precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A mix of simple and complex sentences is used with generally clear meaning, but recurring errors in articles, prepositions and constructions such as 'learn to how' and 'college' dormitories' are noticeable.