Homeschooling versus Traditional Schooling

School versus Homeschooling Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.

Annotated response

17 correction notes

Showing 17 correction notes.

O ne view suggests that children should be taught at home for their better development, while another view claims that it is essential for them to attend school Youngsters going to school often develop better social and life skills these contrast to those who are taught at home receiving better attention.

Children studying in school tend to develop good social skills as they could interact with their peers . The young one learns to share values and to work together. Apart from the classmates, they also get the opportunity to interact with various people, such as teachers, and supporting staff of the school , meaning that the child learns how to meet and behave with those who are

Schools also prepare youngsters School’s rules such as dress code and timings, the code of conduct of jobs. Hence, the youngsters attending the school know well about the acceptable behavior in offices. Again , learning without parents practice being independent in future when they to live in .

Not only these, home teaching brings a major benefit to children needing individual attention and encouragement. If one child needs with math, then the private teacher could for such subjects and time allotted to teach this kid. This will reduce the a child suffering from , and therefore would enjoy the lesson at home.

In conclusion, the advantages of sending children to school exceed those of teaching children at home. Thus, I agree tha t sending the children to school will help them develop to survive in today’s world.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response covers both views and states a clear final opinion, with the strongest aspect being relevant, easy-to-follow main ideas in each paragraph. The main limitation is uneven development of those ideas and frequent grammatical slips that occasionally strain accuracy rather than meaning.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.5

The response addresses all parts of the task, presenting advantages of both schooling and homeschooling with a clear concluding opinion, though some ideas are only partly developed and the opinion arrives late rather than framing the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

Paragraphing is logical and ideas are sequenced recognisably, but cohesion is at times mechanical and inaccurate, with faulty connectors such as 'these contrast to' and 'Not only these' and occasional punctuation lapses.

Lexical Resource

6.0

Vocabulary is generally adequate for the topic with some apt phrases like 'code of conduct' and 'individual attention', but imprecise collocations such as 'resemble with', 'extra helps', and 'the pressure by a child' limit flexibility.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.5

A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, yet errors are frequent, including 'they to live', 'helps them about responsibility', and missing articles and capitals, though meaning usually remains recoverable.