Global Business and Cultural Contact vs National Identity

Some people say that the increasing business and cultural contact between countries is positive development, while others think that many countries will lose their national identities as a result. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The globalization of business and culture has grown in recent years, and countries’ rising engagement in this has been met with both enthusiasm and apprehension . Some regard it highly , while others are worried that it will lead to the loss of national identities. that improved business and cultural relations between countries are more likely to be positive.

There are several reasons to be concerned that an expansion of this practice will cause national identities to fade . a country too focused on cultural exchange may allow its media to be flooded with foreign products. This neglect , in turn, can cause said country’s young generation to grow up without a concept of their traditional culture. The same can be said for international trade, where an eagerness for it can be counterproductive to national identity. If Vietnam were to completely abolish restrictions on rice imports, its rice would experience intense competition from goods produced by other countries, such as Thailand, and as a result, the Vietnamese people might end up forgetting that Vietnam itself is .

a helpful development. A major reason for this view is that economic growth happens as countries exchange goods and services. In history, nations which are deeply involved in trading with others have experienced prosperity, as opposed to those characterized by autarky . Increasing cultural contact between countries, meanwhile, fosters better understanding between different nationalities. People can learn about each other’s customs, develop respect for others’ ways of life , and seek to integrate positive values into their belief system, all thanks to cultural exchange. Therefore, an expansion of business and cultural relations would produce multi-pronged benefits.

In conclusion, while this matter can be interpreted as both advantageous and disadvantageous, I am more inclined to believe in its Nevertheless, it is important to strike a balance , so that nations can reap rewards from international trade and cultural exchange without sacrificing their own identity.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The strongest aspect is the clear, well-organised argument that addresses both views and states a firm personal position, supported by a concrete Vietnam example. The main limitation is some imprecise word choice and slightly mechanical linking that occasionally blur the intended meaning.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

7.5

The response addresses both views thoroughly, presents a clear personal opinion throughout, and develops main ideas with relevant explanation and a concrete example, though a few points remain somewhat general.

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

Ideas progress logically across well-managed paragraphs with a range of cohesive devices, although referencing is occasionally awkward, as in the vague opener 'In this'.

Lexical Resource

7.0

Vocabulary is sufficiently flexible for the topic with some apt phrases like 'autarky' and 'counterproductive', but imprecise collocations such as 'popular for rice crops' and 'believe in its positivity' reduce precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0

A variety of complex structures, including conditionals and relative clauses, are used with good control, with only occasional errors or awkward phrasing that do not impede communication.