Since time immemorial, with each other for improving their social, political, and economic situations in the cities. Nobody can deny that such cooperation could lead to negative consequences as well. believe that there are strong arguments on both sides, I would suggest that development of international contacts has . There are why countries have to work together. First, not every country has enough natural and capital resources for effective development. with each other is an essential part of their everyday operations. Another issue is that is the factor of utmost importance, which has led to the global surge in economic development. Only professionals can support an appropriate level of bank system working or, for instance, education sector. Turning to other side of argument. Collaboration between countries has also a negative influence. For example, after massive migration people with different values, level of income, and attitude to the national authorities begin to live as neighbors. By everyday communication, they continue to lose their roots, to acquire new habits or even to forget their mother language. All of this could probably be a cause of losing national identities of the citizens or some developing countries could disappear with their unique history and traditions. To conclude, I increasing contacts between countries outweigh the negative influence of this collaboration. It would be impossible for some nations to continue their development in various spheres without such cooperation. That’s why, this part of globalization is efficient and has a positive effect on all countries, intelligently.
Global Business and Cultural Contact vs National Identity
Some people say that the increasing business and cultural contact between countries is positive development, while others think that many countries will lose their national identities as a result. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response addresses both views and states a clear opinion, with relevant if somewhat briefly developed supporting ideas. Its main strengths are an adequate range of vocabulary and a clear overall position, while the main limitation is recurring grammatical inaccuracy, including article misuse and faulty sentence structures.
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Task Response
6.5Both views are discussed with a clear personal opinion stated in the introduction and conclusion, though the second view about loss of national identity is developed more thinly and examples remain general.
Coherence and Cohesion
6.0Paragraphing is logical and the argument progresses recognisably, but some linking is mechanical or faulty, such as 'Whilst,' and 'Turning to other side of argument,' which weakens cohesion.
Lexical Resource
6.5There is a sufficient range of vocabulary for the topic, including phrases like 'utmost importance' and 'national identities,' with some awkward or imprecise word choices and occasional errors in countability.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
6.0A mix of simple and complex structures is used, but frequent errors in articles, sentence fragments, punctuation, and constructions like 'has impact that is more positive' reduce accuracy and occasionally obscure meaning.