Corporate Sponsorship of Sports

Many companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think this is good for the world of sports, while others think there are disadvantages of this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Annotated response

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To commence with, there are a lot of advantages to sponsoring sports products by player.if companies provide sports products, the player and the company will new vistas of employment will open. So, unemployment will decrease gradually. Moreover, the company will and pay tax. Therefore, the country will . Furthermore, sports products will come into the market and people can buy these products and use them.

On the other side, some people opine that there are players used these sports products, they could not use other brand products. Moreover, these sports products are very expensive and ordinary people would not buy these products. As a result, some people will make a duplicate copy of sports products and . So it will on the country and would not progress.

Summing up, it is irrefutably true that there are multifarious as a way to advertise players by company. Its advantages outweigh its disadvantages.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 5.0

The strongest aspect is the writer's attempt to cover both sides of the topic and state a clear overall opinion, supported by some relevant ideas. The main limitations are an underdeveloped response that is 70 words below the required length, confusion between sponsorship and sports products, and frequent grammatical and word-choice errors that repeatedly obscure meaning.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

5.0

The response addresses both sides of the topic and gives a position, but ideas are only partially developed, somewhat confused in places, and the response falls 70 words short of the required minimum length.

Coherence and Cohesion

5.0

There is a visible two-sided structure with some linking devices, but progression is mechanical and repetitive, and the argument does not always advance logically from one idea to the next.

Lexical Resource

5.0

The writer attempts a range of ambitious expressions such as 'new vistas of employment' and 'leaps and bounds', but these are often used inaccurately or inappropriately, and word choice errors frequently reduce clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.0

A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, tense, articles, and sentence construction often impede meaning.