Corporate Sponsorship of Sports

Many companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think this is good for the world of sports, while others think there are disadvantages of this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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These days the majority of companies are various strategies such as sponsoring sports events to increase their sales. Some opine that this strategy is not only promoting the games largely but also providing a platform for new players whereas others believe that companies are now selling low quality and products by advertising these . However, both points of view need to be addressed before .

To begin with, one of the major benefits of sponsoring sports events is and it also increases the income of companies. Due to fewer funds for particular games by the government, people are losing their interest in these games. So when companies sponsor these games largely definitely these games. Thus this will help in promoting any sport. Secondly, sponsorship for events can provide a platform for new talented players.

On the other hand, by organizing sports events the majority of companies are selling low-quality products and products which have a negative impact on health. As tobacco and liquor are advertising their products by organizing sports events and these products are extremely harmful to health in general. For example, Kingfisher is basically a wine supplier company but this is using the ground of sporting events in order to boost its income nevertheless wine has .

To sum up, Certainly, sponsoring sports events is not only promoting sports but also providing chances to new sportsmen. However, the negative outcomes of these promotions can not be denied. I personally believe that whether companies are promoting games for their own interest but these are beneficial for promoting sports at all.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response addresses both sides of the discussion and offers an opinion, with the strongest aspect being relevant, concrete support such as the Kingfisher example. The main limitation is imprecise and sometimes confusing language, particularly in the underdeveloped conclusion, which weakens the clarity of the writer's final position.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.0

The response addresses both views and gives an opinion with relevant ideas and an example, but development is uneven and the final position is muddled and only partially clear.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

The essay is organised into clear paragraphs with basic cohesive devices, though progression is at times mechanical and linkers such as 'certainly' and 'nevertheless' are misused.

Lexical Resource

6.0

Vocabulary is adequate for the task with some attempts at less common items like 'health hazardous' and 'formulating the opinion', but word choice is frequently imprecise and includes collocational errors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, and verb forms, such as 'they will more likely to watch' and 'wine has negative on', reduce accuracy.