Buying Famous Brands of Clothes and Cars

Now a day many people want to buy famous brands of clothes, cars and other items. What are the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive and a negative development?

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Nowadays, purchasing items such as cars or clothes from famous brands is becoming increasingly popular among a large number of people. The reasons behind this trend will be outlined in the following essay and, in my opinion, it could bring both positive and negative consequences in equal measure.

To begin with, the large brand products mostly stems from people’s beliefs on personal possessions reflecting wealth, social status, and appearance . More specifically, many people associate clothes and accessories from popular brand names such as Nike or Adidas with high quality and fashionable designs. Therefore, these items are more suitable for enhancing people’s appearance than the products from smaller brands. In addition, some types of goods like cars from are usually sold at exorbitant prices because of their expensive materials or unique features. Hence, these items are often considered as a tool for the rich to show off their

more people purchasing goods from famous brands can bring both merits and drawbacks to the business world. Countries where famous brands are based are more likely to have a strong and healthy economy. For instance, the US – the home country of many large brands, such as Apple and Microsoft, has been the strongest economic superpower since the late 20th century the products of these enterprises are . However, the rise of dominant brand names can be a factor leading to monopoly as large companies will attempt to dominate and finally wipe out smaller rivals to maintain their positions .

In conclusion, the goods from famous brands largely comes from people’s perception of personal belongings showing their wealth, social status and appearance. This trend can bring both positive and harmful effects to the business market and, therefore, should be well-considered by the government to prevent large-scale monopoly .

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The response's strongest aspect is its clear, well-organized development of both the causes of brand consumption and its balanced evaluation as a mixed development. The main limitation is some imprecise word choice and occasional awkward phrasing that slightly blurs meaning in places.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

7.0

The response addresses both questions, presents a clear qualified position that the trend brings both positive and negative effects, and develops main ideas with relevant examples such as Apple, Microsoft, and monopoly concerns.

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

Ideas progress logically across well-managed paragraphs with a range of cohesive devices, though some linking is slightly mechanical and transitions occasionally feel formulaic.

Lexical Resource

7.0

There is a good range of vocabulary, including items like 'exorbitant', 'dominant brand names', and 'social status', but some imprecise collocations, such as 'beliefs on' and 'products are favorable', reduce precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0

Relative clauses, causal clauses and coordinated structures show a good range and generally effective control. Longer sentences remain understandable, though the extended sentence about the US is awkwardly punctuated and could be simplified. Errors do not usually impede understanding.