Buying Famous Brands of Clothes and Cars

Now a day many people want to buy famous brands of clothes, cars and other items. What are the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive and a negative development?

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In recent years, shopping trends for apparel, four-wheelers and other produces have drastically changed from local brands to international. The main reason behind this transformation is the immensely increased in every nook and corner of the world. Apart from that, such brands are investing a lot in their products. However, I do not see it as a positive development

To begin with, if we talk about the time before a decade or two, there were hardly any brands in most developing countries. Though some fashion brands were available, those were found mostly in the urban centres of the nations. Inhabitants of rural areas were not even thinking of possessing cars during that time. On the other hand, today, these popular brands have reached everywhere. Besides this, people also access them through various online shopping platforms, which were never available before a decade. Additionally, famous car brands now provide doorstep services to potential clients, which has helped them increase their sales and is also benefiting the people living in . Moreover, popular branded stores for households also provide home delivery services these days. Famous and big brands do not hesitate these days to invest large amounts while doing promotions regardless of the product. They know the right path to minds. A recent survey conducted by Yale University states that people are elated to access all they need from their mobile phones, and many of them are not even going to the local shops anymore. Thus, in my view, people have got multiple ways to explore and enjoy products from international brands due to increased accessibility. Advertising of these products is also playing a vital role.

Though I do not see it as a positive side of development for multiple reasons, firstly, due to the increased popularity of foreign brands, local business owners, especially in developing countries, face huge losses. Some of them had to close their businesses or had to lay off some of their staff members. In this way, these international brands are ruining the employment rates of such nations. In India, for instance, many local merchants had to close their grocery stores after Dmart- a popular produce store- everywhere, from an urban centre to a village. It cannot be denied that investment in the country is increased with this kind of development, but people today have become these brands. Many people have developed a sense of jealousy by flaunting their shopping in front of their friends and distant relatives. This ill-feeling is taking the stress amongst society to the next level. Even more often fight with their parents- who belong to a humble background- to possess mobile phones from famous brands, such as , etc. Hence, I think this is not at all a positive development.

To conclude, famous conglomerates have found ways to reach customers by making their products accessible and promoting them on various platforms, which has changed shopping. of such kind of consumerism outweigh the advantages. That is why this is a negative development. Perhaps, authorities should take to promote local merchants who will eventually help the country’s economy.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The response develops reasons for buying branded products and maintains a negative judgement, with extended examples. However, its repeated focus on foreign brands narrows the question, since famous brands can also be domestic. Some conclusions about local business and consumer behaviour need qualification. Recurring collocational and grammatical errors further reduce precision despite generally clear progression.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

7.0

The essay explains accessibility and promotion and maintains a clear negative position. However, it repeatedly treats famous brands as foreign or international brands, which narrows the question unnecessarily. Several examples support a global-versus-local argument more directly than the broader issue of brand popularity.

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

Ideas are organized in logical paragraphs with clear progression throughout, though some linking is mechanical and paragraph transitions occasionally feel abrupt.

Lexical Resource

6.0

There is an adequate range of vocabulary for the topic, including items like 'conglomerates' and 'flaunting,' but repeated awkward collocations and word-choice errors such as 'produces' and 'mad behind these brands' reduce precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A mix of simple and complex sentence forms is used with some flexibility, yet frequent errors in agreement, tense, and relative clause construction, while rarely blocking meaning, are noticeable across the response.