Advantages and Disadvantages of Modern Tourism

A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that benefits of tourism outweight its drawbacks?

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Over the last few years, tourism has become one of the major contributors to the economy of several nations. The tourism industry has been growing enormously. Although the tourism industry in the modern world has been generating an abundance of revenue, there are a few drawbacks too. However, , the advantages of tourism outweigh the disadvantages.

Over the years, the tourism industry has been expanding, contributing to the economic development and growth of countries. Moreover, the tourism industry has been creating a lot of employment opportunities for the local public. In other words, tourism boosts a country’s economy by creating many new job openings for the local people. Tourists spend money on a wide range of services such as hotels, amusement parks, transportation, food and medical services. This way, tourism yields an additional income supporting the country’s economy. Indirectly or directly, the tourism industry boosts the travel industry and helps in the improvement of infrastructure. For instance, results in more demand for hotels, tourist guides and many more, encouraging local businesses to employ more people to fulfill their requirements.

However, tourism affects the environment and cleanliness of popular tourist places. If the tourist location is not managed properly, it can cause deleterious effects on the ecology of that place. The demand for the increased accommodation can lead to the construction of more hotels. This often leads to the destruction of forests and over-exploitation of natural resources, disturbing the world’s natural ecology.

To recapitulate, the tourism industry has some downsides like disastrous impacts on forests, but it does not overshadow the positive impact on the country’s economy. I believe that the benefits of tourism its drawbacks.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The response fully answers both parts of the task, stating a clear position and supporting it with relevant economic and environmental arguments. Its strongest aspect is the well-organised development of the advantages, while the main limitation is noticeable repetition of ideas and phrasing, particularly around employment and economic benefit.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

7.0

The response addresses all parts of the task with a clear, consistent position and relevant supporting detail, though some ideas remain repetitive rather than extended.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5

Progression is logical with clear paragraphing, but cohesion is partly mechanical and ideas about jobs and the economy are restated rather than advanced.

Lexical Resource

7.0

There is a sufficient range of topic-related vocabulary such as 'revenue', 'deleterious effects' and 'over-exploitation', with occasional awkward collocations like 'tourists' crowd'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0

A variety of complex structures is used with good flexibility, and errors such as the subject-verb mismatch in 'benefits of tourism totally outweighs' are minor and rare.