Advantages and Disadvantages of Modern Tourism

A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that benefits of tourism outweight its drawbacks?

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Tourism industry is one of the most booming sectors in the world, which connects people from one end of the world to the other. It is a wide-ranging business that encompasses , transport, food, entertainment and other related industries. Sadly, tourism also has some pitfalls that can become detrimental to the country if not handled properly. In this essay, both sides of the argument, that is, the advantages and disadvantages, will be elaborated to reach a conclusion.

Moving on to the provided by the tourism industry, there are three major ones. Firstly, it augments the economy of the country and provides a boost by the inflow of foreign exchange. This money is utilized for the development of infrastructure for both the citizens and the upcoming tourists as well as preservation of the . Secondly, as previously hinted, tourism contributes to the livelihood of a large section of the population through hotels, restaurants, travel agents, various fun activities and shops selling local crafts. Many people are engaged in the diverse sections of this industry, and tourism aids in solving the unemployment and poverty issues, especially in the developing countries. Moreover, international visitors act as the medium of cultural exchange between two countries. For example, when an American visits India, they are enticed by the colourful cities and savoury food items of the country, and this accelerates the . This is true for any country that the travellers visit.

Though the profitability of this industry makes it one of the most alluring enterprises of a country, an attempt to tempt more explorers to sojourn there may spin out of control due to mismanagement. If the administration does not set proper rules and regulations for visitation and stay for the tourists, it may lead to the destruction of historical buildings and public places. of excursionists may also have a detrimental effect on the natural habitat of the place due to littering and not following certain ordinances. Apart from this, negligence on the part of the management can illegal activities like trafficking and unauthorized business of antiques and valuables. Local people also get the opportunity to cheat the guests as they are unaware of the customs and the statutes of the alien country.

In conclusion, it can be noted that the expediencies of the tourism industry eclipse the imperfections by a long stretch. Although the flaws can be handled by the proper manoevure by the government and the common people, the boons have already been contributing to the country’s economy and welfare of the inhabitants.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The response's strongest aspect is its broad vocabulary and clear four-paragraph structure covering both sides before a decisive conclusion. The main limitation is that some ideas, particularly the cultural exchange example, are developed in a tangential or overstated way, and certain word choices sound forced or unnatural.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

7.0

The response addresses both advantages and disadvantages and states a clear position that benefits outweigh drawbacks, though some supporting points, such as the cultural exchange example, are developed unevenly or tangentially.

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

Ideas are logically organised across clear paragraphs with effective linking devices, although progression within some paragraphs is occasionally loose rather than fully sustained.

Lexical Resource

7.0

There is a wide and flexible range of vocabulary with awareness of style, but some less common items are imprecise or awkward, including 'inturn', 'conveniences', 'expediencies' and the misspelt 'manoevure'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0

A variety of complex structures is used with generally good control, though errors such as 'Tourism industry is' and occasional article and phrasing slips appear without impeding meaning.