Advantages and Disadvantages of Modern Tourism

A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that benefits of tourism outweight its drawbacks?

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Nowadays tourism generates a significant portion of national income for many countries, but it has certain drawbacks too. This essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of tourism and provide a logical conclusion.

The two main advantages of and a large number of new job openings for the local people. Firstly, tourists spend money on a wide range of services, including hotels, amusements, transportation, food and medical services. This way, tourism yields an additional income, greatly supporting the country’s economy. Secondly, tourism increases the level of employment by bringing new jobs. For instance, the influx of tourists results in a larger restaurant workers, tour guides, hotel staff and employees of retail services, business owners to hire more people for these positions.

But tourism also has some major disadvantages like destruction of popular tourist destinations and development of illegal economic activities. buildings, temples and monuments struggle to cope with a vast amount of and get damaged. Also, the large number of tourists can cause environmental problems. For instance, when places of interest are overcrowded, natural resources often become overexploited. What’s more, the presence of a considerable number of tourists with a lot of money to spend, and often carrying valuables such as cameras and jewelry, increases the attraction for criminals and brings with it activities like robbery and drug dealing. However, proper hospitality management and correct usage of tourism revenue by the local government can eliminate these disadvantages.

To conclude, although tourism can have certain negative effects like destructive impact and , it has an extremely positive and provides a large number of new jobs for the local people. I believe that these benefits of tourism outweigh its drawbacks.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The response fully addresses the task, presenting clear, well-developed arguments for both sides and a direct position in the conclusion. Its strongest aspect is the logical, coherent organization with relevant supporting examples, while the main limitation is the occasional imprecision in word choice and grammar, such as 'exhorting business owners' and a stray foreign character.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

7.0

The response addresses all parts of the task, covers both advantages and disadvantages with relevant examples, and states a clear position that benefits outweigh drawbacks.

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

Ideas are logically organized into clear paragraphs with a range of cohesive devices used naturally, though linking is at times mechanical.

Lexical Resource

7.0

Vocabulary is sufficiently flexible and topic-appropriate, with some imprecise usage such as 'exhorting' and occasional awkward collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0

A variety of complex structures is used with generally good control, alongside noticeable errors in articles, word forms, and a stray character that do not impede meaning.