Transport and Car Use in Edmonton

Transport
Cars

The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.

Annotated response

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the reasons that people drive cars while the percentage of all transportation modes which are used by different people is mentioned in the pie chart.

the city residents use cars as their main transportation method while LRT is their secondary option. People use cars to traverse distances to work locations, business destinations, and for driving their children to school.

To begin with the pie chart, the Edmonton community uses multiple transportation methods to travel. The second highest use is LRT with 35% which is at its zenith, however, the bus and taxi are being utilised by 10 % which is not preferred as shown in the diagram.

the highest percentage which people use for their transportation needs shows that 45% of people select cars as their main transportation method. The city has multiple reasons why people drive cars for work-commuting purposes which include 55% of drivers who use cars for work and 45% who drive for business purposes and 40% who use cars to take their children to school. The two other reasons people drive cars are shopping and leisure activities which both have a 15% usage rate.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The response covers both visuals with an accurate selection of key figures and a clear overview of car use dominance. Its main limitation is occasionally awkward or imprecise wording and some mechanical linking, which slightly reduce the clarity of otherwise well-organised reporting.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Achievement

7.0

The response provides a clear overview, accurately reports the main figures from both the pie chart (45%, 35%, 10%) and the bar/table data, and makes relevant comparisons, with only minor lapses such as the unsupported claim that bus and taxi 'are not preferred'.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5

Progression is generally clear with logical paragraphing and workable cohesive devices, but linking is at times mechanical ('To begin with', 'Moving towards') and some referencing is imprecise.

Lexical Resource

6.5

Vocabulary is adequate for the task with some attempted variety, but phrases like 'at its zenith', 'the bar graph display the reasons' and 'multiple reasons why people drive cars for work-commuting purposes' show imprecise or awkward usage.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.5

A range of structures is attempted, though errors such as 'The bar graph display', 'the second highest use is LRT... which is at its zenith', and a very long final sentence are noticeable without seriously impeding meaning.

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