Participants in Melbourne Social Centre Activities (2000–2020)

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Cambridge IELTS 19 Academic Test 1 Writing Task 1 visual

Annotated response

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The graph provides information on the number of participants in various activities at a social in Melbourne, Australia, from 2000 to 2020. , martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis, and musical performances.

the highest number of participants, starting at around 60 in 2000 and slightly increasing to about 65 by 2020. Martial arts began with approximately 35 participants in 2000 but . Amateur dramatics , fluctuating to a peak of 30 in 2005 and 2015 before falling to 15 by 2020.

Table tennis maintained relatively stable numbers, starting at 20 participants in 2000 and increasing slightly to 25 by 2020. Musical performances started with but saw significant growth, .

, the film club remained the most popular activity, while in participation. In contrast, , and .

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The response is well organised with a clear overview and fluent, accurate language throughout. Its main weakness is data accuracy: several figures and trends misread the graph, including table tennis, martial arts, and amateur dramatics, which undermines the reliability of the report.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Achievement

5.5

The response covers all five activities, provides an overview, and uses appropriate length, but multiple data points and trends are inaccurate against the graph, such as table tennis rising to about 53 rather than 25, martial arts ending near 36 rather than declining to 25, and amateur dramatics falling to about 6 by 2020.

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

The report is logically organised with clear paragraphing, a summarising introduction, a body of trend descriptions, and a cohesive concluding summary using linkers such as 'while' and 'in contrast'.

Lexical Resource

7.0

Vocabulary is sufficiently flexible and precise for describing trends, with phrases like 'consistently had the highest number', 'significant growth', and 'a slight upward trend', with only a minor spelling slip ('center').

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0

A good range of structures is used accurately, including relative and participle clauses ('starting at around 60', 'before falling to 15') and varied tense forms, with only rare, non-impeding errors such as 'saw declines'.

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