Participants in Melbourne Social Centre Activities (2000–2020)

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Cambridge IELTS 19 Academic Test 1 Writing Task 1 visual

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The line graph presents data on the number of individuals engaging in various activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia, over the two-decade period from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the number of participants in table tennis and musical performances rose significantly during this period, whereas involvement in amateur dramatics steadily declined. In contrast , experienced minor fluctuations , with the film club consistently attracting the highest number of participants throughout.

In 2000, the film club had the largest number of participants (64), while martial arts ranked second with 38. Over the next decade, the film club saw a slight dip , reaching its lowest point at around 60 in 2010, before rebounding to by 2020. Martial arts, meanwhile, experienced a decline in 2005, followed by a modest increase in 2010. Despite a small drop again in 2015, in 2020, showing no significant long-term change .

Regarding the other activities, amateur dramatics initially had more participants (26) than table tennis in 2000. While amateur dramatics rose slightly in 2005, it then declined steadily to participants by 2020. In contrast, table tennis experienced a notable rise over the years, in 2020. Musical performances, which had no participants in 2000 and 2005, gradually gained popularity from 2010 onwards, by the end of the period.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 8.0

The strongest aspect is the accurate selection and comparison of all five activities with well-chosen supporting figures and a clear overview. The main limitation is only occasional looseness, such as describing musical performances' growth as significant relative to table tennis and minor punctuation slips around spacing.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Achievement

8.0

The response covers all five activities with a clear overview and data that closely matches the graph, with only minor imprecision such as calling musical performances' rise significant when table tennis grew more sharply.

Coherence and Cohesion

8.0

Ideas are organised logically into an introduction, overview, and grouped body paragraphs, with cohesive devices used naturally and no noticeable strain on the reader.

Lexical Resource

8.0

Vocabulary is flexible and precise for describing trends, including rebounding, fluctuation, and gaining popularity, with only rare awkward or imprecise word choices.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

8.0

A wide range of structures, including relative clauses and complex trend descriptions, is used with consistent accuracy and only very occasional minor slips.