Process of Making Carbonated Drinks

The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Key features: Process of Making Carbonated Drinks

WhyThis is aProcess diagram — it asks you to explain a sequence from beginning to end.

SoWe split the points intoOverview(how many stages, and where it starts and ends)andStages(each step in order).

Overview

2 points

Stages

5 points

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Response 01
Estimated band7.0/ 9

Overall assessment

The response describes the main process in a clear sequence and gives a useful overview. However, the overview omits filling, and several details need closer grounding in the diagram: the household water source and cylindrical tank shape are unsupported, while the wording places the second filtration step inside the mixing tank.

TA

Task Achievement

The response follows the main sequence and provides an overview, but filling is omitted from that overview. The household source and cylindrical tank shape are unsupported, and the wording places the second filtration step in the mixing tank rather than in the separate downstream filter.

7.0
CC

Coherence and Cohesion

Ideas progress logically through the stages with a range of cohesive devices such as 'thereafter', 'during this process' and 'at this stage', used mostly naturally.

7.0
LR

Lexical Resource

Vocabulary is varied and generally appropriate to a process description, including “carbonation”, “softened” and “dispatched”. Some expressions need greater precision: “cylindrical tank” adds an unsupported shape, and “being filled into bottles and cans” is less natural than describing liquid being poured into containers.

7.0
GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

A variety of complex structures, including relative clauses and passive forms, is used with generally good control. “Stages at which the water is cleaned” is grammatically acceptable; the main clause-level weakness is the wording that appears to place both mixing and filtration inside the same tank.

7.0

What to work on next

Ground every detail more closely in the diagram, avoiding unsupported specifics like the origin of the raw water, while still noting all labelled steps.

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Useful vocabulary: Process of Making Carbonated Drinks

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