在著名景点只顾自拍而不观赏

Taking Selfies at Famous Places Instead of Looking

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

如今,越来越多的人前往著名景点给自己拍照,却不去看那个地方。

你认为为什么会出现这种情况?

这是积极的还是消极的趋势?

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写作思路:在著名景点只顾自拍而不观赏

为什么这是双问题类 ,要求你在一道题中回答两个不同的问题。

所以我们把思路分为问题 1(回答第一个问题)和问题 2(回答第二个问题)。

问题 1

3条思路

问题 2

3条思路

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范文 01
估算分数5.5/ 9

总体评价

The response tackles both parts of the task, offering reasons for the trend and a clear negative judgement supported by personal examples. Its strongest aspect is relevant, relatable example use that connects ideas to the questions. The main limitation is persistent grammatical and word-choice inaccuracy, together with mechanical organisation, which frequently makes the meaning harder to follow.

TR

任务回应

The response addresses both questions, giving plausible reasons for the photo-taking behaviour and a clear negative evaluation supported by personal examples, though ideas are somewhat underdeveloped and expressed imprecisely at points.

6.0
CC

连贯与衔接

There is a visible overall structure, but linking is sometimes mechanical and references are unclear; comma-spliced clauses in the body paragraphs also make relationships between ideas harder to follow.

5.5
LR

词汇丰富度

Vocabulary shows attempts at topic-related items such as 'trend', 'identity', and 'exposure', but word choice and form are often inaccurate ('fast forwarding era', 'stand to the rich and adventurist society', 'loose their value', 'click my own memory'), limiting precision.

5.5
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

A mix of simple and complex forms is attempted, but errors are frequent and sometimes impede meaning, including tense misuse ('they had already seen', 'I had click'), subject-verb disagreement, and faulty structures like 'this situation keeping them away'.

5.5

下一步改进重点

Strengthen grammatical accuracy and cohesion by proofreading for tense, subject-verb agreement, and smoother linking between ideas while developing each supporting point more fully.

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实用词汇:在著名景点只顾自拍而不观赏

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句型:在著名景点只顾自拍而不观赏

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