专业人才流向发达国家

Brain Drain of Professionals to Developed Countries

An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation?

越来越多的专业人士,如医生和教师,正离开自己较贫穷的国家,到发达国家工作。这会造成什么问题?你能提出哪些解决办法来应对这种情况?

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写作思路:专业人才流向发达国家

为什么这是问题解决类 ,要求你指出原因或问题,并提出解决办法。

所以我们把思路分为原因与问题(起因或会出现的问题)和解决办法(如何解决)。

原因与问题

5条思路

解决办法

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估算分数6.5/ 9

总体评价

The essay addresses both problems and solutions, with substantial relevant discussion. However, several inaccurate or unclear expressions obscure the ideas, particularly the description of professionals being "promulgated". Long sentences, an agreement error and a sentence fragment also reduce control. Rare vocabulary is not automatically wrong, but its meaning must fit the intended claim.

TR

任务回应

The essay addresses both questions fully, presents developed main ideas about brain drain and a clear set of solutions, and supports them with a relevant example, though some argument development is verbose rather than sharply focused.

7.0
CC

连贯与衔接

Progression is broadly clear with logical paragraphing and linking devices, but cohesion is at times strained by long, convoluted sentences and slightly forced transitions such as 'Further are the problems posed'.

6.5
LR

词汇丰富度

The response attempts a wide range of vocabulary, but expressions such as "anchoring rostrum", "they shall be promulgated" and "paucity and lacuna of the health index" obscure meaning. By contrast, "garnered notoriety" is valid, and the rare verb "guerdoning" does mean rewarding.

6.0
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

There is a range of complex structures, but control is uneven. The fragment beginning "Hence, making a poor country poorer" lacks a main verb, while "the wages, which is" has an agreement problem. Long sentences also make several relationships harder to follow.

6.5

下一步改进重点

Replace inflated or misused vocabulary with precise, natural word choices so that the strong ideas are communicated with consistent clarity.

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