The position is clear throughout and the main ideas of financial burden, self-sufficiency, and ethical concerns are developed with relevant examples, though the job-provision dimension of the question receives only brief acknowledgement rather than full evaluation.
7.5Ideas progress logically across well-organised paragraphs with a range of cohesive devices used naturally, with only occasional slightly mechanical linking such as formulaic 'Firstly' and 'Additionally'.
7.5Vocabulary is flexible and precise, including items like 'labour conditions', 'self-reliance', and 'perpetuating an industry', with only rare lapses in word choice or collocation.
7.5A wide range of complex structures is used with generally good control, including relative clauses and conditionals, with occasional errors or awkward constructions that do not impede meaning.
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