爱好是否必须有难度才有乐趣

The essay addresses the question with a clear position against hobbies needing to be difficult, supported by developed personal examples, though the support is anecdotal and somewhat narrow in perspective.

The sequence of ideas is broadly clear, but the essay is presented as one continuous paragraph. Repeated linkers and the long extreme-hobbies comparison make its organisation harder to follow.

Vocabulary is adequate for the message with some topic-appropriate items, but it is often informal and includes inaccurate collocations such as 'fondness of' and 'engage to extremely hard hobbies'.

A mix of simple and complex sentences is attempted, yet errors in agreement, tense, and sentence construction occur frequently without seriously impeding meaning.

The position is clear and maintained throughout with relevant supporting ideas, but development is uneven and the discussion of government school policies is only loosely connected to whether hobbies must be difficult.

The essay has a logical overall structure with linking devices, but some transitions and connections, such as the shift to schooling measures, feel mechanical or weakly justified.

There is a wide range of less common vocabulary, yet frequent inexact usage such as 'tedious', 'disaccord', 'foster', 'additive pressure' and 'advice' reduces precision at times.

A variety of complex structures is used with generally good control, and errors in agreement or phrasing are mostly minor and rarely impede understanding.

The response addresses all parts of the task with a clear, consistent position, develops main ideas on both sides, and supports them with relevant examples such as extreme sports and stamp collecting.

Ideas are organised logically into a concession, the writer’s response and a conclusion. However, the move from varied preferences to the claim that hobbies cannot be ranked by difficulty is not fully explained, and the conclusion initially repeats background information rather than synthesising the reasons.

Topic vocabulary such as accomplishment, expertise and adrenalin conveys the main ideas, but expressions such as trigger the adrenalin and conquer those hobbies are awkward. Breathtaking is also used where the intended requirement needs a noun, and accomplishment and achievement repeat much the same meaning.

A range of complex structures is used and the meaning remains clear. Errors include although combined with but, singular countable nouns in people have different interest, passion and hobby, and the faulty coordination people need ... and require them to master.