写信感谢餐厅的生日聚会

Thank-You Letter to Restaurant for Birthday Party

You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. Write a letter to the restaurant to thank them. Mention the food, service and the atmosphere. Also suggest any improvements to make things better.

上周你和一些朋友在一家餐厅庆祝了生日。聚会非常成功,你和朋友们都度过了一个愉快的夜晚。给餐厅写一封信,向他们表示感谢。提到食物、服务和氛围。同时就如何改进、让情况变得更好提出任何建议。

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书信要点:写信感谢餐厅的生日聚会

为什么这是正式书信 ,要求你用正式的语气回应每个提示点。

所以我们按题目列出的每个提示点整理要点。

Mention the food, service and the atmosphere

5个要点

Suggest any improvements to make things better

6个要点

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估算分数6.5/ 9

总体评价

The response's strongest aspect is its complete coverage of the task, as it thanks the restaurant for the food, service, and atmosphere and offers concrete suggestions like using the terrace for parties. The main limitation is unnatural word choice and recurring grammatical slips that make several sentences sound stilted without blocking meaning.

TA

任务完成情况

The letter achieves its thankful purpose and addresses all prompt elements—food, service, atmosphere, and improvements—with relevant detail and a generally suitable semi-formal tone, though phrasing such as 'valuable services' and the slightly vague improvement section reduces precision.

7.0
CC

连贯与衔接

Ideas are organised in clear paragraphs with a logical progression from thanks to suggestions, but some cohesive devices are misused or unnatural, including 'On the face of it', 'Besides', and 'Suffice to say'.

6.5
LR

词汇丰富度

There is a reasonable range of vocabulary with some ambitious attempts ('luscious', 'in the nick of time'), but several collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as 'at the beck and call of us' and 'did such a great arrangement'.

6.5
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

A mix of sentence types is attempted with some complex structures, yet recurring errors in tense agreement ('They make us feel proud'), relative clauses ('which really brings appreciation'), and punctuation around 'however' affect accuracy.

6.5

下一步改进重点

Revise collocations and verb tense agreement, replacing forced idiomatic phrases with natural expressions to lift accuracy and fluency throughout the letter.

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