向职场导师介绍自己的信

Letter to Introduce Yourself to Your Workplace Mentor

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor – an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

Dear ....................,

你所在单位的所有新员工都有一位导师——一位经验丰富的同事，为他们的职业发展提供建议和支持。作为新员工，你已经拿到了你的导师的详细信息。

写一封信，向你的新导师介绍你自己。在信中

• 简要概述你之前的学习和工作经历

• 解释你希望导师能给你什么帮助

• 就与导师的第一次见面提出安排建议

Dear ....................,

范文（1） 书信要点（6） 写作练习

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书信要点：向职场导师介绍自己的信

为什么这是半正式书信 ，要求你用礼貌、半正式的语气回应每个提示点。

所以我们按题目列出的每个提示点整理要点。

Give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

4个要点

Explain what help you hope your mentor can give

1个要点

Suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

1个要点

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估算分数6.0/ 9

总体评价

The letter addresses all three bullet points in a suitably polite tone, which is its main strength. However, the detail is thin and occasionally confused, such as saying the relationship-management skill will be useful to the mentor, and recurring spelling and grammatical slips limit precision throughout.

TA

任务完成情况

The purpose is clear and all three bullet points are addressed, but the outline of studies and experience and the requested help are thinly developed and include a confused detail about skills being useful to the mentor.

6.0
CC

连贯与衔接

Progression is broadly clear with a logical paragraph order, though some linking within paragraphs is mechanical and a few ideas, such as the transition into the meeting request, are awkwardly connected.

6.0
LR

词汇丰富度

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the communicative task, with some appropriate workplace phrasing, but errors such as 'inquire information', 'convient', 'appreicate' and 'Best regard' reduce precision.

6.0
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

A range of structures is attempted, including participle and relative clauses, but recurring errors such as 'Graduated from university of Windsor, a quite good university, I worked' and 'the next Friday' affect accuracy.

6.0

下一步改进重点

Develop each bullet with fuller, relevant detail and proofread carefully to eliminate spelling and sentence-structure errors before submitting.

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