美国家庭按年收入分布情况

US Households by Annual Income

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

下图显示了2007年、2011年和2015年美国按年收入划分的家庭数量。

请选择并报告主要特征来概括信息,并在相关之处进行比较。

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要点:美国家庭按年收入分布情况

为什么这是柱状图 ,要求你比较最重要的几个类别。

所以我们把要点分为概述(最大的差异或规律)和要点(值得描述的数据和对比)。

概述

3个要点

要点

6个要点

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估算分数7.0/ 9

总体评价

The response covers all five income categories with a clear overview and relevant comparisons, and it demonstrates ambitious grammatical range. Its main limitations are several data inaccuracies, such as describing a steady rise in the highest bracket when the chart shows a dip in 2011, and a heavily contrived vocabulary that sometimes reads unnaturally.

TA

任务完成情况

The response covers all five categories and offers an overview, but its claim of a gradual ascent in the highest-income group overlooks the visible dip in 2011. It also infers upward mobility from group counts and exaggerates lower-band volatility; the final paragraph repeats previously reported data.

6.5
CC

连贯与衔接

The response is logically organised with a clear progression from overview to category details, though cohesion devices are at times heavy or mechanical, and the final paragraph's redundancy weakens the overall flow.

7.0
LR

词汇丰富度

A wide range of less common vocabulary is attempted, but the frequency of inflated or imprecise items such as 'unflappable consistency', 'transient zeniths', and 'ascendant trajectory' produces occasional inaccuracy in word choice and collocation.

7.0
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

A wide range of complex structures, including apposition, participle clauses, and varied subordination, is used with generally strong control and only occasional awkward or overextended constructions.

7.5

下一步改进重点

Verify every figure and trend against the chart before writing, and replace inflated or unnatural expressions with precise, natural academic wording.

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