英国居民水果和蔬菜摄入达标率

UK Fruit and Vegetable Consumption Rates

The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruits and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.

下面的图表显示了2002年、2006年和2010年英国人口中摄入推荐每日水果和蔬菜量的人所占的百分比。

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要点:英国居民水果和蔬菜摄入达标率

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所以我们把要点分为概述(最大的差异或规律)和要点(值得描述的数据和对比)。

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估算分数7.0/ 9

总体评价

The report gives a clear overview of the highest and lowest groups and describes the main changes with generally controlled language. Its principal factual error is the claim that children’s 11% in 2002 was half the figure for both men and women; that comparison is correct only for men.

TA

任务完成情况

The response reports the main group patterns and several accurate figures, but 11% for children in 2002 is half of the 22% for men, not half of the 25% for women. This makes the stated comparison with both adult groups inaccurate.

7.0
CC

连贯与衔接

The overview and separate adult and child discussions provide clear organisation. Some ranking language makes the adult comparisons less direct than simply giving the year-by-year proportions, but the progression remains understandable.

7.0
LR

词汇丰富度

Vocabulary is flexible and appropriate for describing data, using terms like 'witnessed', 'marginally', and 'slightly', with only a small slip such as 'in term of'.

7.0
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

A good range of structures, including complex and comparative sentences, is used with generally strong control and only occasional minor errors that do not affect clarity.

7.0

下一步改进重点

Correct the 2002 comparison: children’s 11% is half of men’s 22%, while women’s figure is 25%. Use direct comparisons of the proportions to keep the adult trends easy to follow.

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