2011年旅游咨询处收到的咨询量

Tourist Information Office Enquiries in 2011

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

下图显示了2011年某个为期六个月的时间段内,某城市旅游咨询处收到的咨询数量。

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要点:2011年旅游咨询处收到的咨询量

为什么这是折线图 ,要求你描述随时间变化的主要趋势和变化。

所以我们把要点分为概述(整个时期的主要趋势)和要点(值得描述的数据和对比)。

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总体评价

The report clearly contrasts the rising in-person and telephone totals with the decline in written enquiries. Most figures and the overall organisation are effective. The main issue is the telephone timeline, which places March in both the fall and subsequent rise. The approximate early figure for written enquiries is reasonable, while a few expressions could be more natural.

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任务完成情况

All three channels are described with a clear overview and mostly accurate figures. The telephone sentence is internally inconsistent about February and March: the fall occurs in February, followed by a rise in March. The qualified description of early written enquiries as around 700 is a reasonable approximation.

7.0
CC

连贯与衔接

Ideas are logically sequenced across clear paragraphs with effective linking such as 'Similarly' and 'the polar opposite', giving a generally clear progression throughout.

7.0
LR

词汇丰富度

Vocabulary is flexible and largely precise for describing trends and channels, with natural phrases like 'sharp increase' and 'gradually declining', though a few expressions such as 'mailing platforms' are slightly awkward.

7.0
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

A good range of structures is used with consistent accuracy, including complex comparative and participle constructions, with only minor slips that do not impede meaning.

7.0

下一步改进重点

State the telephone sequence clearly: about 900 in January, 800 in February, then 1,000 in both March and April before the later rise. Keep qualified approximations where they accurately describe the chart.

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