西南机场改建规划

Southwest Airport Redevelopment Plans

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

下面的规划图显示了一座机场目前的场地情况,以及明年改建后的样子。

请选择并报告主要特征来概括信息,并在相关之处进行比较。

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要点:西南机场改建规划

为什么这是地图 ,要求你描述一个地方发生了哪些变化。

所以我们把要点分为概述(这个地方的整体变化)和主要变化(新增、拆除、移动或保留了什么)。

概述

1个要点

主要变化

8个要点

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估算分数5.5/ 9

总体评价

The response attempts all major redevelopment features, including the expanded gates, sky train, bag drop, and new facilities, which is its strongest aspect. However, key details are frequently garbled or inaccurate, such as the walkway, gate locations, and check-in changes, and the dense, error-prone sentences obscure the comparisons throughout.

TA

任务完成情况

The response addresses the task and provides an overview of the main changes, covering most key features such as the doubled entrances, new gates, sky train, bag drop, and car hire, but several details are inaccurate or unclear, including the walkway position, the gate expansion, and the check-in and café changes, and some reporting is hard to follow.

5.5
CC

连贯与衔接

Ideas are grouped by area with some use of linking devices, yet progression is frequently unclear because referents are ambiguous and sentences run together, making the sequence of comparisons hard to follow.

5.0
LR

词汇丰富度

The response attempts topic-appropriate vocabulary such as passport control, security, and redevelopment, but there are noticeable word-choice errors like yielded maps, advancement for redevelopment, and develop for built, alongside imprecise phrasing that limits flexibility.

5.5
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

A range of structures is attempted, but frequent errors, including fragments such as in the centre, has 8 gates and faulty constructions like after the hall have a passport control, regularly reduce clarity and accuracy.

5.0

下一步改进重点

Rewrite the description in clearly separated sentences that accurately verify each feature and location against the plans before reporting it.

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句型:西南机场改建规划

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