1997至2012年博物馆各类游客人数

Museum Visitors by Type Between 1997 and 2012

The chart below shows the numbers of three types of visitors to a museum between 1997 and 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

下面的图表显示了1997年至2012年某博物馆三类游客的人数。

请选择并报告主要特征来概括信息,并在相关之处进行比较。

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要点:1997至2012年博物馆各类游客人数

为什么这是柱状图 ,要求你比较最重要的几个类别。

所以我们把要点分为概述(最大的差异或规律)和要点(值得描述的数据和对比)。

概述

2个要点

要点

6个要点

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估算分数7.5/ 9

总体评价

The response reports accurate category figures and gives a clear overview of the contrasting overall trends. Adults remain the largest group, while under-15 attendance declines. However, it omits the 2002 figures and does not quantify the stated rise in total attendance. More explicit comparisons and a clearer time frame for the exhibition increase would strengthen an otherwise well-organised description.

TA

任务完成情况

The response gives a clear overview of the contrasting group trends and reports the selected category figures accurately, including the adult peak of 400,500. It does not discuss the 2002 values or quantify the net rise in total attendance, and the interval behind the slight exhibition increase needs clarification.

8.0
CC

连贯与衔接

Ideas progress logically through overview, baseline data, and subsequent trends, with effective use of referencing and cohesive devices such as 'thereafter' and 'this was not the case', though the sequencing is somewhat predictable.

7.0
LR

词汇丰富度

Vocabulary is varied and mostly appropriate, including attendance figures, welcomed and footfall. Some expressions are less precise: visitors witnessed an upward trend makes the people sound like observers, while the four years examined leaves the net change less explicit.

7.0
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

Sentence structures are varied and controlled, using participle clauses and contrastive constructions accurately, with only occasional minor issues that do not impede meaning.

7.0

下一步改进重点

Quantify the total change and make key comparisons more explicit. Use the 2002 adult figure to distinguish near stability from later growth, and clarify the interval behind the exhibition increase. Describe under-15 and exhibition attendance as contrasting trends, not reversals.

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句型:1997至2012年博物馆各类游客人数

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