学院咖啡厅改造前后的平面图

College Café Redesign Plans Before and Now

The plans below show a college café before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

下面的平面图显示了一家学院咖啡厅改造前的样子以及现在的样子。

请选择并报告主要特征来概括信息,并在相关之处进行比较。

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要点:学院咖啡厅改造前后的平面图

为什么这是地图 ,要求你描述一个地方发生了哪些变化。

所以我们把要点分为概述(这个地方的整体变化)和主要变化(新增、拆除、移动或保留了什么)。

概述

3个要点

主要变化

9个要点

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估算分数6.0/ 9

总体评价

The response covers most key changes, including the takeaway section, coffee bar, salad bar, barbecue, and outdoor seating, with a clear before-and-after structure. Its main limitations are some imprecise location descriptions, an overview that generalises rather than states the main transformations, and recurring grammatical and tense errors.

TA

任务完成情况

The response provides an overview and reports most key features and changes accurately, but some details are imprecise, such as describing the barbecue as on the right when it sits on the far left, and the vague reference to tables and chairs placement, which limits accuracy and detail selection.

6.0
CC

连贯与衔接

The organisation follows a logical before-and-after progression with linking devices like 'Overall' and 'But today', yet cohesion is at times mechanical or informal, including 'If we talk about' and abrupt sentence openings.

6.0
LR

词汇丰富度

Vocabulary is adequate for the task with appropriate map language such as 'converted into', 'remained unchanged', and 'section', but it lacks flexibility and precision, with informal phrasing and repetition of simple terms like 'right side' and 'left side'.

6.0
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

A range of structures is attempted, but errors are frequent enough to be noticeable, including subject-verb agreement ('the cafe now have'), tense inconsistency ('toilets and bin are present'), and faulty parallelism, though meaning remains generally clear.

6.0

下一步改进重点

Proofread for subject-verb agreement and consistent past/present tense, and sharpen the overview to state the main overall changes precisely rather than generally.

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