澳大利亚五城市的咖啡与茶习惯

Coffee and Tea Habits in Five Australian Cities

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

下图显示了一项关于澳大利亚五个城市居民购买和饮用咖啡与茶习惯的调查结果。

请选择并报告主要特征来概括信息,并在相关之处进行比较。

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要点:澳大利亚五城市的咖啡与茶习惯

为什么这是柱状图 ,要求你比较最重要的几个类别。

所以我们把要点分为概述(最大的差异或规律)和要点(值得描述的数据和对比)。

概述

2个要点

要点

9个要点

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估算分数7.5/ 9

总体评价

The response presents an accurate, well-selected summary of the chart with a clear overview and precise data referencing across all three habits and five cities. Its main limitation is a slightly mechanical, list-like progression in the body paragraphs, which prevents the organisation from reaching the highest level.

TA

任务完成情况

The response covers all three habits in all five cities with an accurate overview highlighting the cafe trend and Adelaide's exception, and the reported figures match the chart closely.

8.0
CC

连贯与衔接

Progression is logical with a clear overview, sequenced groupings, and effective referencing devices, though some body paragraphs read as somewhat mechanical city-by-city listing.

7.0
LR

词汇丰富度

Vocabulary is flexible and mostly precise, including useful comparisons such as "by a slight margin" and "nearly level". However, "most characteristic of" is vague for reporting a proportion, and "stocking up on" implies buying a supply that the survey does not establish.

7.0
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

A wide range of structures is used with strong accuracy, including complex comparative and appositive constructions, with only very minor awkwardness such as 'bought more instant coffee by a slight margin (50%)'.

8.0

下一步改进重点

Vary how comparisons are linked between sentences so the body paragraphs read as connected trends rather than city-by-city data listings.

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