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七个国家的平均退休年龄

Average Retirement Age in Seven Countries

The charts below show average age of men and women who retired from work in seven countries in 2004 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

下图显示了2004年和2008年七个国家男性和女性退出工作岗位的平均年龄。

请选择并报告主要特征来概括信息,并在相关之处进行比较。

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要点:七个国家的平均退休年龄

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所以我们把要点分为概述(最大的差异或规律)和要点(值得描述的数据和对比)。

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总体评价

The response gives a clear, well-organised summary of the main country and gender differences, with trends and exceptions that match the charts. The numerical readings are reasonable estimates from the bars. Its main weaknesses are a few awkward collocations and limited numerical support for 2008. Adding the general upward trend to the overview would make the summary more complete.

TA

任务完成情况

The response identifies the main country and gender comparisons and correctly describes the broad trends and exceptions. Its plotted values are defensible estimates. The overview could also state the general rise over time, and selected 2008 figures would strengthen the detail.

8.0
CC

连贯与衔接

Ideas progress logically through an overview followed by male and then female data, with effective use of referencing and cohesive devices like 'respectively' and 'except for' that rarely feel mechanical.

8.0
LR

词汇丰富度

Vocabulary shows useful range in expressions such as “leaving the workforce” and “remained stable”. However, “breakdown on”, “over the chart for women” and “the lowest data” are awkward or unsuitable collocations that reduce lexical precision.

7.0
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

A wide range of complex structures, including relative clauses and participle phrases, is used with consistent accuracy and only rare, non-impeding slips.

8.0

下一步改进重点

Add the general rise over time to the overview and support the 2008 discussion with selected endpoint values. Refine collocations such as “breakdown on”, “over the chart for women” and “the lowest data”.

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