海外游客每年到访澳大利亚的人数

Annual Overseas Visitors to Australia

The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. NUMBER OF VISITORS (million) 1975 | 2005 SOUTH KOREA JAPAN CHINA USA BRITAIN EUROPE | 2.9 3.2 0.3 0.4 0.9 1.1 | 9.1 12.0 0.8 1.1 2.9 4.5 Total | 8.8 | 30.4

下面的折线图显示了海外居民每年访问澳大利亚的次数。下面的表格给出了游客来源国的信息。访客人数(百万)1975年 | 2005年 韩国 日本 中国 美国 英国 欧洲 | 2.9 3.2 0.3 0.4 0.9 1.1 | 9.1 12.0 0.8 1.1 2.9 4.5 总计 | 8.8 | 30.4

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要点:海外游客每年到访澳大利亚的人数

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总体评价

The response covers both visuals well, with a clear overview, accurate figures, and logical two-part paragraphing supported by some effective vocabulary such as 'skyrocketed' and 'hit a peak'. The main limitation is a handful of imprecise or awkward expressions, including 'originality' instead of 'origin', 'between 1985 to 1995', and the vague phrase 'in ascending other in', alongside minor data rounding such as 'about 8 million' for 8.8 million.

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任务完成情况

The response presents a clear overview of the upward trend and the highest and lowest countries, selects and reports most key figures accurately from both visuals, though one value is rounded away from the table's 8.8 million and the description of Europe, Britain and the USA is somewhat vague.

7.0
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连贯与衔接

Paragraphing is logical and progression through the line graph then the table is clear, supported by cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'First' and 'On the other hand', though some phrases like 'in ascending other in' reduce clarity locally.

7.0
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词汇丰富度

Vocabulary is generally flexible and appropriate, including items like 'saw an upward trend' and 'hit a peak', with occasional imprecise choices such as 'originality' for 'origin' and 'the least no of visits'.

7.0
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语法多样性与准确性

A range of sentence structures is used with mostly accurate control, but there are recurring minor grammatical and prepositional errors, including 'between 1985 to 1995' and inconsistent article use.

7.0

下一步改进重点

Refine word choice and linking phrases so comparisons between countries and time periods are expressed precisely and without ambiguity.

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