Starting Age for Formal Education

Some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age. Some think they should begin at at least 7 years old. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Education and academics have been a and a prime matter of various debates. To this, some people opine that formal education should be started as early as possible while hold the view that they should start their education journey post a certain age limit, such as after one attains an age of 7. I agree with the latter statement and consider that one should not rush in such sensitive matters as education. In the paragraphs to come, I shall talk about both the views and put forth my thoughts on this topic.

Education and literacy are the prime stanchions that contour one’s career definition to withstand the obstruction imposed by the cacophony of the world. One who is educated gets gifted with the streamlined persona to get away with all the impediments endowed to one’s way. Therefore, one must be budded with bolstered fundamentals right from the beginning of their career. At times, it could seem prudential to some people to send their children and get them set into the formal education system as soon as possible as that would have them schooling and education culture early in the day. This makes some people send their children to schools as early as they

In contrast to that, some people hold the idea of starting one’s formal education past an age where one is ready to be of schooling and education. I firmly agree with this. First of all, it takes a certain level of intellect to be ready to get absorbed in an educational institution which might seem daunting to the young and delicate minds. It might be extremely herculean for very young kids. Secondly, people past a certain age of 6-7 are significantly competent and receptive in demeanour as when it comes to learning potential that could only come with a matured and developed mindset. Hence, I believe it is extremely essential for the parents and even the educational administrators to realize that children should be prepared well at home before being sent to institutions.

Conclusively, it could thus be said that though people might find it intellectual to set their children to get the gradations of a real-time education set up as early as it could be, in the long run, of subjecting young kids and fragile minds to be put under excruciating pressure of formal classes.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The response fully addresses the task, discussing both views and stating a clear personal opinion with a logical overall structure. Its strongest aspect is the sustained attempt at complex, ambitious language, but this frequently produces unnatural or inflated phrasing, and the first body paragraph develops the early-education view only thinly compared with the opposing side.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.5

Both views are addressed and a clear opinion is stated and maintained, though the early-education view is developed less fully than the opposing position and supporting detail is uneven.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

Paragraphing is logical and progression is broadly clear, but transitions are sometimes mechanical and the second paragraph relies on general assertion rather than cohesive development of ideas.

Lexical Resource

6.0

There is a wide range of less common vocabulary attempted, but recurring unnatural collocations such as 'significant others', 'budded with bolstered fundamentals' and 'bone of innumerable discussions' reduce precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.5

A variety of complex structures is used with generally clear meaning, though frequent minor errors in article use, agreement and phrasing are noticeable throughout.