Should Animal Experiments Be Banned

“Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favour of them because of their benefits to humanity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.”

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It is irrefutable that there are various scientific procedures carried out throughout the globe on innocent creatures, and this frequently generates a heated debate. Some individuals these must be forbidden since it is against the moral ethics to harm animals. In contrast, the opposite school of thought believe it is appropriate to conduct experiments on them. In the forthcoming paragraphs, this exposition will elucidate both the perspectives from a different viewpoint with credible illustrations and my certainty in the former stance.

To start with, with the substantial improvements in contemporary research programs, animals are to develop vaccines, medicines and other essential products for mankind. Some people claim that it is dangerous to them and can have adverse effects on the ecosystem and food chain, eventually resulting in the extinction of species. There are numerous which can be adapted to perform these experiments. To exemplify, criminals accused of fatal crimes and on the verge of receiving capital punishment can be used for researching as their survival has minimal impact on society. Therefore, animals can be set free rather than using them to benefit human beings.

On the other side, the rest of the population argues that it is more reliable and effective to research species as of having the humans. It is also believed that early man had evolved from apes many centuries earlier and led a life similar to animals in dense forests. Hence, scientists prefer to examine creatures such as monkeys, chimpanzees and gorillas to perform experiments. For instance, during the development of , , and when there were no detrimental side effects, it was given to the public. Hence, it is of remarkable significance to perform basic trials on .

Taking everything into consideration, although animals play a crucial role while performing research, it is inhuman to make them suffer for and should be ceased with immediate effect and supplanted with criminals.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response covers both viewpoints, states a clear personal position, and ends with a definitive conclusion, showing a well-organized overall structure. Its main limitation is the content quality of the supporting argument, especially the proposal to experiment on death-row criminals, which weakens the persuasiveness of the ideas, alongside recurring imprecise word choice.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.0

Both views are addressed, a clear opinion is stated and maintained, and ideas are supported with examples, but the development is uneven and the suggestion of experimenting on condemned criminals is an implausible and ethically flawed extension that weakens the argument.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

The response follows a logical four-part structure with cohesive devices such as 'To start with' and 'On the other side', though some linking and referencing, including the final 'Hence' and shifting referents, feel mechanical or imprecise.

Lexical Resource

6.0

There is a wide vocabulary range with attempts at less common items like 'irrefutable', 'supplanted' and 'detrimental', but errors in collocation and meaning, such as 'foster that', 'my certainty' and using 'flora' for animals, reduce precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A mix of complex structures is used with generally clear meaning, but there are noticeable grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement ('the rest of the population argues... they are massive chance') and faulty passive forms ('should be ceased').