Reducing City Traffic by Limiting the Need to Travel

The only way to reduce the amount of traffic in cities today is by reducing the need for people to travel from home to work, shopping and education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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On the one hand, it is undoubtedly true that if individuals are ready to work, study at home and also follow online shopping strategies, the number of vehicles is comparatively decreased. For example, during the Covid pandemic time, employees were restricted from travelling, pupils began online learning systems, and were part of the online purchase culture. This has helped both areas to reduce traffic , accidents and ailments. Apart from this, this culture will help organizations to reduce their cost in attainable ways.

On the other hand, as part of , employees have to travel to all parts of the world, students want to go to their school for learning, and individuals have entered the market for their household chores. Nobody can jeopardize these activities in the name of traffic. These are our imperative daily activities . To reduce traffic in city areas, society should have and roads, the same as in European or Gulf countries. This will help reduce the ratio of huge traffic sporadically.

Furthermore, classical road laws always help to curb the density of traffic in metros. As a developing country, these types of updated laws are part of the betterment of the development of society. Lastly, stringent actions should be taken against violators in urban areas. This will help to be a warm awareness to the public and also help to deterioration of traffic. For example, in GCC countries, traffic signal violators should get 48 hours of imprisonment without fail. The governments in GCC countries agree that these strict rules help them to , and to reduce traffic accidents.

In conclusion, it is undoubtedly true that rather than restricting the public in their daily activities, it is advisable to serve them in effective ways. It will curb all the road catastrophes.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response takes a clear position against restricting daily travel and offers relevant alternatives such as infrastructure and enforcement, supported by pandemic and GCC examples. However, ideas are unevenly developed, the argument sometimes drifts from the question's focus, and frequent inaccurate word choices reduce precision.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.0

The response presents a clear disagreement and relevant main ideas with examples, but development is uneven and some content, such as organizational cost savings, only loosely supports the argument about reducing traffic.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

Paragraphing is logical and linking devices guide the reader, though cohesion is at times mechanical and some ideas within paragraphs connect imperfectly.

Lexical Resource

6.0

There is adequate range of vocabulary with some attempts at less common items, but several inaccurate collocations and word choices, such as 'vehicles inroads' and 'hamper the violators', affect precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A mix of simple and complex sentence structures is used with reasonable accuracy, but errors in verb forms and constructions, such as 'they also it help to reduce', are noticeable.