Reducing City Traffic by Limiting the Need to Travel

The only way to reduce the amount of traffic in cities today is by reducing the need for people to travel from home to work, shopping and education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Traffic congestion is perhaps a curse in many cities, and it kills valuable time on the one hand and degrades people's overall productivity and economic progress on the other hand. Since the main reason for traffic gridlocks on the roads is the overwhelming number of people who commute daily, limiting it to a reasonable extent is conceivably the best solution to curb the bad traffic. Though the government and city administration can not ask citizens to stay indoors and arrange the "work from home" facility for every professional, there are ways to implement it without creating confusion and dissatisfaction among citizens and curbing traffic problems at the same time. Since we need to reduce the number of commuters and vehicles on the road, which is the only viable solution to traffic problems, we can sort out the professionals who can work from home and then distribute the facilities like shopping centres, parks and banks to all residential areas so that people can get them within walking distance. For instance, IT professionals, lawyers, bookkeepers, customer service representatives, instructors and similar other professionals do not need to travel to their office daily as they can execute most of their responsibilities from home with the help of technology. This way the road traffic could be reduced to a great extent. Moreover, improving some facilities and digitalising many services can deter people from unnecessary daily commuting. For instance, many parents travel to their children's schools daily to drop them off and pick them up. If schools offer safe and convenient transportation facilities, parents would rely on such facilities rather than travelling daily. Similarly, banking, utility bill payment and help desk should be digitalised so that we can complete our tasks from home rather than visiting those offices. Thus the movement of people would be restricted and the traffic problem would be reduced. To conclude, traffic congestion in many cities is so big a problem that the authority is struggling to keep it under control. A large number of commuters and the vehicles they use are the primary reason for that, and it is expected that the government would facilitate people so that they need to commute less frequently.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The response clearly supports reducing travel and offers relevant examples about remote work and nearby services. However, its single paragraph weakens organisation, and the claim that reducing travel is the only solution is not fully justified. The school-transport example also needs a clearer distinction between reducing individual car journeys and reducing the need to travel.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.5

The response clearly supports reducing travel and gives relevant examples of remote work and local services. However, the claim that this is the only viable solution needs fuller justification. The school-transport example also concerns sharing transport rather than eliminating the need for a journey.

Coherence and Cohesion

5.5

The ideas have a recognisable sequence, but the entire response is one continuous paragraph. Remote work, nearby services and school transport need clearer grouping, and some long sentences combine several points in ways that make progression harder to follow.

Lexical Resource

7.0

Vocabulary is sufficiently flexible and precise, with apt items such as traffic gridlocks, deter and digitalised, and only occasional imprecision such as the opening framing of congestion as a curse.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0

Complex structures are used with generally good control, including relative and conditional clauses. Occasional noun-phrase problems remain, such as the bare singular "help desk" in the list of services to be digitalised. Most meaning is clear despite these minor inaccuracies.