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Problems and Solutions for Lack of Sleep

Question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In today’s fast-paced world, an increasing number of individuals sufficient sleep. This essay will the main adverse consequences of sleep deprivation and give .

To begin with, the lack of sleep can result in many problems related to both the physical and mental health of a person. Firstly, it leads to fatigue, contributing to such as memory, concentration, and decision-making. For instance, people who do not get enough sleep may not be able to concentrate properly at work or to make the right choices, which then could result in risks not only to them but also to the company they work for. In addition, may also result in an increased risk of developing a range of health problems like obesity, diabetes, hypertension, and heart diseases. Several studies have indicated that sleep deprivation alters the hormonal balance resulting in the production of more stress hormones and other disorders related to metabolism.

However, some measures are available that can be put into practice to counteract sleep deprivation and encourage good sleeping habits. To elaborate it, by adhering to a sleep schedule that is consistent, where the person tries to go to bed and rise early every day, is a very effective way of regulating the body’s internal clock and consequently better sleep quality. with a good mattress, low light, and a silent setting supports relaxation and peaceful sleep.

In conclusion, the problems related to sleep deprivation are worse, leading to bad physical and mental health hence taking into practice the suggested solutions such as maintaining a consistent sleep schedule, having a peaceful sleep environment, and practicing relaxation activities, can help the modern day individuals overcome sleep difficulties and improve their overall health.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The strongest aspect is the clear, well-organised treatment of both parts of the task, supported by generally precise and varied vocabulary. The main limitation is that the solutions are less developed than the problems, and grammatical control occasionally slips in complex sentences.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

TR Task Response

7.0

The response addresses both questions directly, presents relevant developed ideas on health and cognitive effects and practical solutions, though the second body paragraph is thinner with solutions listed rather than fully extended.

CC Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

Ideas are organised logically across clear paragraphs with appropriate cohesive devices, although some linking is slightly mechanical and one transition is awkwardly used.

LR Lexical Resource

7.0

There is a good range of topic-related vocabulary such as 'cognitive functions', 'hormonal balance' and 'regulating the body's internal clock', with only occasional unnatural collocations like 'are a victim of not obtaining sufficient sleep'.

GRA Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.5

A variety of complex structures is used with generally good control, but faulty constructions such as 'To elaborate it, by adhering to a sleep schedule... is a very effective way' show lapses in accuracy.