Some people advocate that there is no need for human intervention to prevent the inherent and inevitable process of natural extinction of animal . In this essay, I will challenge this school of thought, on grounds of human responsibility for mainly causing such occurrences, and the adverse impacts of animal extinction on human life, . Firstly, activities carried out by humans are the main culprit behind the unprecedented rate of species extinction today. These activities, including habitat destruction, pollution, climate change, and overexploitation of natural resources, pose serious threats to the destruction of once unspoiled animals’ habit, and accordingly the survival of hundreds of valuable species of fauna. In fact, there is a general consensus that extinction induced by humans occurs at a significantly faster rate than natural extinctions. Given this, it is argued that ethical and moral obligations compel humans to take urgent measures to prevent extinction due to their major role in accelerating the process. Secondly, animals can have a noticeable influence on human life. Indeed, humans have an inextricable relationship with wildlife, which means that the could seriously threaten the survival of mankind. Coral reefs, for instance, are incredibly diverse ecosystems that support numerous marine species and provide livelihoods for millions of people through tourism and fisheries. The extinction of coral species due to factors like climate change and pollution can lead to the collapse of entire reef ecosystems, impacting both marine biodiversity and the livelihoods of coastal communities. This is a testament to how investing in the protection of a wild animal is synonymous with safeguarding and enhancing the existence of humans. Lastly, the loss of animal species could detrimentally affect the ecosystem progress in the field of science. Ecosystems comprise a complex web of interdependencies among species, with each species having a unique and important role to play. As a result, when one species is lost forever, these intricate relationships are damaged, leading to disrupted food chains and ultimately a decline in biodiversity. Moreover, there is no doubt that besides allowing better chances to withstand and recover from environmental changes, maintaining biodiversity, or in other words, diverse ecosystems, is fundamental to scientific advancements, including the discovery of new medicines and treatments that would tremendously improve our quality of life. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that it is of great importance for humans to in order to slow down the extinction rate of animal the implications for overall human life are too overwhelming.
Sample response & feedback
Preventing Animal Extinction as a Natural Process
Question
It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct. There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Annotated response
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Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response presents a clear, consistent disagreement with the prompt and develops three well-chosen arguments with relevant examples, showing strong task coverage. The main limitation is occasional over-generalised reasoning and a small number of slips such as 'animal pieces' and 'habit', alongside somewhat formulaic paragraph transitions.
IELTS criteria
How each score was decided
TR Task Response
8.0The position is clear throughout, with relevant reasons concerning human responsibility, livelihoods and biodiversity. The coral example provides substantial support, while the science argument and the distinction between natural and human-caused extinction could be developed further.
CC Coherence and Cohesion
7.0The argument progresses logically through signposted sections on human responsibility, human dependence and biodiversity. Referencing generally supports this progression, although some transitions are formulaic and the final argument partly overlaps with the preceding one.
LR Lexical Resource
8.0Vocabulary is flexible and precise, with natural collocations such as 'inextricable relationship', 'overexploitation of natural resources', and 'interdependencies', despite rare word-choice slips like 'animal pieces' and 'habit'.
GRA Grammatical Range and Accuracy
8.0A wide range of complex structures is used with generally strong control, including subordinate clauses and passive constructions. Local weaknesses include the bare singular noun “ecosystem” in the introduction and the comma joining independent clauses before “otherwise” in the conclusion.