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Photographers Following Famous People Everywhere

Question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Famous people are photographed everywhere they go by professional photographers, and this . Some people think it is good because the public wants to know about celebrities, but other people think it is wrong to follow them. I will discuss both views and give my opinion.

On the one hand, there are reasons to support the photographers. Famous people earn a lot of money because they are famous, and the photos help to . Fans are interested in the lives of singers, actors and sports stars, so the photos give the public what it wants. Also, sometimes the photos show the truth about a famous person.

On the other hand, following someone every day is that never experience. Celebrities cannot relax in a park or take their children to school without cameras around them. This can cause stress and even accidents, because some drivers follow famous people . is not fair.

I believe both sides have a point, but overall I think . It is fine to take photos at concerts, film festivals and other public events, but it is not fine to follow people to their homes. In my country, some newspapers have already stopped buying , and .

In conclusion, although the public is interested in famous people, I think photographing them everywhere is wrong, and rules are needed to protect their private lives.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The response discusses both views and develops a clear position that distinguishes public events from intrusion into private life. Its paragraphs progress logically, and the newspaper example supports the proposed limits. However, the claim that photographs reveal the truth remains unexplained, while the earnings argument partly repeats the idea of fame. Repeated everyday vocabulary also limits precision despite generally controlled grammar.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

TR Task Response

7.0

Both views and a clear personal position are present, with a relevant newspaper example; however, the claim about revealing the truth is undeveloped and the earnings argument partly repeats the premise of fame.

CC Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

Ideas are organised logically into clear paragraphs with appropriate cohesive devices like 'on the one hand' and 'in conclusion', and progression is easy to follow throughout.

LR Lexical Resource

6.5

Vocabulary communicates the argument clearly but relies heavily on famous, photos and broad expressions such as have limits; more precise references would improve range and clarity.

GRA Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.5

A mix of simple and complex structures is used with generally good control and frequent error-free sentences, but the range of complex forms remains limited and somewhat repetitive.