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Photographers Following Famous People Everywhere

Question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In today's world, famous individuals are constantly followed by professional photographers and journalists who capture their every move. While some people believe that this is a positive development, others argue that photographers violate their privacy by following them. In this essay, I will discuss both viewpoints and that photographers and journalists should respect the privacy of famous people.

On the one hand, proponents of photographing famous people argue that these individuals are public figures, and the public about their lives. Celebrities, often regarded as role models, influence the general public through their actions and opinions. are naturally curious about their private lives and enjoy their world. For instance, magazines and social media platforms thrive on exclusive about celebrities, which cater to the demand for content related to their personal lives.

believe that photographers who follow famous people cross a line by invading their privacy. While celebrities may be public figures, they are also individuals entitled to their own personal space and time. Constant surveillance by photographers can lead to , anxiety, and even dangerous situations. For example, some paparazzi have been known to engage in reckless behaviour, chasing celebrities in high-speed at risk.

In my opinion, while the public's interest in celebrities is undeniable, the right to privacy should . Photographers should and respect the boundaries of personal space, allowing celebrities to live without constant scrutiny.

In conclusion, although the public's fascination with famous people is understandable, it is crucial to respect their privacy. Photographers should prioritize and acknowledge that everyone, regardless of their fame, deserves to enjoy their personal lives without intrusion.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The response addresses the discussion task thoroughly, presenting both views with a clear personal opinion and well-organized paragraphs. Its strongest aspect is the coherent, well-signposted structure and consistent range of vocabulary, while the main limitation is that supporting ideas rely on fairly general reasoning and examples rather than deeper, more specific development.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

TR Task Response

7.0

The response addresses all parts of the task, presents a clear position throughout, and extends main ideas with relevant support, though development remains somewhat general.

CC Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

Ideas progress logically across clearly organized paragraphs with a range of cohesive devices used naturally, despite occasionally formulaic linking.

LR Lexical Resource

7.0

Vocabulary is sufficiently flexible and precise, with natural collocations such as 'undue stress' and 'cross a line', though some phrases are mildly conventional.

GRA Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0

A variety of complex structures is used with good control, and errors are minor and non-impeding, such as slightly awkward phrasing in 'take a much higher precedence'.