Having Children Later in Life

Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What do you think are the reasons for this? Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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In modern society, there has been a major concern that many couples have delayed parenthood. Some explanations for this social trend will be put forward before an analysis of its impacts on society and family life is given.

A few reasons can be given to justify the trend of giving birth at later stages of life. First, the labour market is increasingly competitive, and it is a norm that young parents defer having children to devote the whole time in the first years of their employment for their future career. Second, it is believed that children are raised better by older parents. This seems valid since older fathers and mothers are generally wealthier, more experienced, and more willing to take the responsibility of bringing up a child.

The trend exerts both advantageous and disadvantageous influence on society and families. On the one hand, children born to more prosperous and experienced parents can receive a better and more comprehensive education, and thus contribute more to society when they grow up. In each household, the parents may also reap the benefits of this trend, as their first working years are not interrupted by pregnancy and childcare. On the other hand, when an aged couple decides to give birth, there are serious health risks for the woman in the prenatal and postnatal period. If any complicated maternal health problem arises, would be turned upside down.

To conclude, the tendency to have children at later ages is caused by a number of factors, such as the competitiveness of the job market for young adults, and both the positive and negative impacts of it can be seen in families and society.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The response develops relevant reasons and discusses benefits and drawbacks in clearly organised paragraphs. However, it does not make the comparison requested by the question: the conclusion only states that both positive and negative impacts exist. Vocabulary is a strength, while a few grammatical slips reduce precision.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.0

The response explains reasons for delayed parenthood and discusses positive and negative effects, but it does not decide whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. The conclusion states that both kinds of impact exist, leaving the required judgement unanswered.

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

The response is logically organised with clear paragraphing and generally cohesive progression, though linking is at times mechanical and the conclusion does not resolve the comparison.

Lexical Resource

8.0

A wide and precise vocabulary is used naturally, including items like defer parenthood, lay a foundation, and prenatal period, with only occasional awkward phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0

A variety of complex structures is used with good control, despite minor errors such as the life whole family and devote the whole time in that do not impede meaning.