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Government Action Against Overusing Natural Resources

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The overuse of natural resources causes an ultimate exhaust of them. People have been using them to be in the swim of new styles such as making new furniture of recent design. This causes a huge harm to the environment. Therefore, the government should discourage people the overuse of these resources. To what extent do you support or oppose the idea?

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In our life, we use the natural resources in many different ways and in fact natural resources are vital for . Our lives will simply become impossible if we stop using natural resources. But it is a matter of pity that the way we overuse those resources. The existing natural resources are limited and the demand and consumption are increasing day by day as the world population is increasing. As a result, natural resources are rather being reduced with the increased and imprudent uses. We must control the overuse of these priceless resources for our own survival

The population and their demand are increasing and with technological improvements the natural resources are being used . We use those to meet our daily and vital needs. For instance, we use natural gas to cook food. But the natural resources like fuels and gas are also used to . In fact, will try to use natural resources to . so frequently and a symbol of their prominence. Thus they use natural resources like wood and fuel so unwisely and in my opinion, this is quite unnecessary.

The government of a country to . People are unaware of the aftereffects of this overuse. So the government has to play a vital role by sending the message to the mass population and by taking necessary initiatives to prevent this overuse of the natural resources. However, we all should understand the issue and should the overuse of our natural resources. The government can not stop such a bad trend all alone. Making new furniture is a right to a citizen and Government can not stop this by enforcing laws only. The citizen must be the devastating aftereffects.

In conclusion, I personally believe that the Government should be strict and discourage the mass people overusing natural resources. In addition, a comprehensive effort by all is needed to make the steps taken by the Government successful.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The strongest aspect is the clear, consistent position supporting government discouragement of resource overuse, developed across well-organised paragraphs with relevant reasoning and examples. The main limitation is the frequent grammatical inaccuracy and some awkward or non-idiomatic phrasing, which keeps the language from reaching a higher level of precision despite the message remaining mostly clear.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

TR Task Response

6.5

The response addresses the question directly, presents a clear position supporting government action with the qualification of shared responsibility, and develops main ideas with relevant examples, though some points are repetitively elaborated rather than extended.

CC Coherence and Cohesion

6.5

Paragraphing is logical and progression is broadly clear with a conventional conclusion, but cohesion is somewhat mechanical and a few transitions and references are loosely managed.

LR Lexical Resource

6.0

There is an adequate range of topic vocabulary, including “imprudent” and “devastating aftereffects”, but inaccurate combinations such as “fulfil our luxury”, “the mass people” and “look after the betterment” reduce precision.

GRA Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but errors in agreement and verb forms, such as People changes and the government of a country sworn to look after, are frequent enough to lower accuracy, though meaning remains mostly clear.

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