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Future Challenges in Environment Population and Education

Question

Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment but population and education as well. What problems, in your opinion, will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome?

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The COVID-19 pandemic has shattered the world to its core, and ongoing wars in different regions have brought us to the verge of a large-scale war more devastating than at any time in human history. Thus the world is facing numerous challenges on top of its regular problems like global warming, overpopulation and poverty. My country, I believe, will face economic challenges and in a war in the next ten years.

The global economy has been hit hard by the ongoing pandemic, restrictions, wars, and recessions. My country, in particular, relies on imports more heavily than its exports. As a result, the foreign currency reserve may shrink in the future, making it more difficult to import necessary fuels and goods from other countries. It will surely have negative consequences on our economy. Moreover, our job market is likely to become more unstable due to the challenges faced by businesses. Besides, the world is watching appalling and devastating wars, and many countries, including ours, in a war in the next few years. If this happens, the fate of our country is bleak.

To address the upcoming economic problems of our country, to take diverse initiatives to strengthen our export industries. They can offer incentives to export-oriented companies, for example, to achieve that. They should also take measures to increase our foreign reserves so that we do not get trapped in a situation where we will fail to import necessary foods and medicines . One way to achieve that is to restrict the amount someone from our country can spend on a foreign tour from now on. To avoid wars and regional conflicts, our leaders have to take part in friendly discussions with their counterparts instead of . We must understand that it is not a time to get involved in a war when millions of people are suffering from the ongoing pandemic and recession.

In conclusion, our country has to act prudently to avoid economic crises and wars as these two are ahead of us.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The response directly answers both parts of the question with a clear position and reasonably developed ideas about economic crisis and war. Its strongest aspect is coherent paragraph organization and relevant solutions, while the main limitation is occasional imprecise or awkward word choice that slightly weakens the academic tone.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

TR Task Response

7.0

The response addresses both questions, identifies two clear problems, presents a position, and supports them with relevant explanation and solutions, though development of the war problem remains somewhat thin.

CC Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

Ideas are logically organized into clear paragraphs with a coherent overall progression, although linking devices are occasionally mechanical and repetitive.

LR Lexical Resource

6.5

There is a sufficient range of vocabulary for the topic, but some imprecise or non-idiomatic expressions such as 'shattered the world to its core' and 'hot rhetorics' reduce precision.

GRA Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0

A variety of complex structures are used with generally good control, and errors are minor and rarely impede understanding.