It is sometimes predicted that everyone would prefer a life without work responsibilities over one where work dominates their schedule . I largely disagree with this prediction due to the financial and emotional benefits offered by a career even though work-related stress can be an influencing factor. The foremost rationale why I am against the assumption that people prefer not to work is financial gain . Benefits including monthly salaries and other incentives not only allow them to earn a living but also sustain their own families. Since most people know they would struggle financially without a job, that they would all choose not to work is unlikely. Another reason for my rejection of the belief that people would certainly choose a life without a job lies in the sense of fulfillment . In reality, it is not rare for professionals to pursue a career since it gives their lives meaning. For instance, firefighters can take pride in saving lives from a burning house, and teachers feel valued when their students succeed. If these individuals were to abandon their duties , they might find their lives meaningless. However, I acknowledge the role of stress in people’s . This stems from the unbearable amount of tension that certain employees are suffering, breeding the desire to remove themselves from most professional commitments. In reality, a number of young Japanese are embracing the idea of joblessness. Instead of working excessive hours , they move to the countryside to lead self-sufficient lives, reporting due to the absence of constant deadlines and office conflicts . In conclusion, I mostly reject that people would certainly prefer not to work when given a choice between a life without work and one filled mostly with work as many perceive a job as a source of both income and satisfaction despite a certain level of stress. I also suggest that people prioritize balancing their professional and personal responsibilities to lead more fulfilling lives.
Sample response & feedback
Choosing Between a Life Without Work and Working
Question
When asked to choose between a life without work and working most of the time, people would always choose not to work. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response maintains a clear position and supports it with relevant financial and personal benefits of employment. Examples of teachers and firefighters help illustrate fulfillment. Its main limitations are some strained phrasing and incomplete links to the precise choice in the prompt: the financial argument emphasizes necessity, while the countryside example does not establish a life without work. These points need clearer explanation rather than a stronger conclusion alone.
IELTS criteria
How each score was decided
TR Task Response
7.0The response maintains a clear position and gives relevant financial and personal reasons for working, but the concession needs a clearer distinction between giving up paid employment and living without work.
CC Coherence and Cohesion
7.0Ideas progress logically across clearly organised paragraphs with a range of cohesive devices used naturally, though a few transitions are slightly mechanical in places.
LR Lexical Resource
7.0Vocabulary is sufficiently wide and precise for the topic, with good awareness of style and collocation, but occasional strained or unnatural word choices reduce precision.
GRA Grammatical Range and Accuracy
7.0Complex sentences, conditionals and participial phrases show generally good grammatical control, although some constructions are awkward and punctuation spacing is inconsistent.