Alternative Medicine Instead of Usual Doctors

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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In contemporary times, it is seen that a burgeoning population with health issues are relying on homoeopathy, electropathy and Ayurveda rather than visiting a hospital and getting treated by a specialist. , it is a negative development, particularly for fatal ailments that need the treatment of a doctor.

First, depending on alternative medicines can exacerbate a person’s illness. To elaborate, when people experience stomach pain, they adopt different ways to get rid of it. By applying those, they might get temporary relief. However, in the long run, they are amazed to see that stomach pain develops into stomach ulcers or cancer. Therefore, they make it a serious disease. Moreover, every individual has different body needs. Applying the same treatment to every person can have drastic consequences. To exemplify, adverts are telecast on television, showing protein shakes, multivitamins and oil for those with physical issues. They might be children, or women. The same things have been suggested to all. , people tend to buy if they find even a single symptom in that advertisement. Thus they .

Furthermore, homoeopathy Ayurveda was very in the earlier times, when everything was pure. But now, due to adulteration, one cannot the ingredients used in making medicines. Intake of these medicines creates other health issues among people if they recover from one problem. In addition, people’s behaviour is one of the biggest obstacles to believing in . They consider the same ailments . They are superstitious. Thus they avoid going to the doctor for treatment such as smallpox, and measles, to name a few.

To conclude, it is clear that many people have more belief in other ways of treating themselves than visiting a healthcare centre. In this way, they make their diseases more serious and that behaviour of the multitudes now and then puts their life at risk. If they get to recover, the very next moment, they develop other kinds of health issues.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The strongest aspect is the clearly stated, consistently maintained negative position, supported with extended explanation and examples across relevant body paragraphs. The main limitation is uneven and sometimes inaccurate language, including awkward word choices and garbled phrases such as 'homoeopathy Ayurveda' and 'medicinal Technology', alongside occasionally strained argumentation.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.5

The response addresses the question with a clear negative position, develops main ideas such as worsening illness and unreliable ingredients, and supports them with examples, though some development is loose or repetitive.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

Ideas are arranged in coherent paragraphs with clear progression, but cohesive devices are sometimes mechanical or misused, and links between sentences occasionally feel forced.

Lexical Resource

6.0

There is a noticeable attempt at less common vocabulary, yet several items are inappropriate or inaccurate, such as 'oldsters', 'medicinal Technology', and the muddled phrase 'homoeopathy Ayurveda'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A mix of simple and complex structures is used with generally clear meaning, but recurring errors in agreement, article use, and sentence construction reduce accuracy.