Letter to Mrs Barrett Offering Summer Home Help

Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter • suggest how you could help her in her home • say why you would like to do this work • explain when you will and will not be available You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Mrs Barrett,

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Dear Mrs

I am writing this letter because I would like to

I can help you in your home. I can do all types of I am a specialist in cooking and can make all types of dishes. do all kinds of work necessary for daily routine like cleaning the house, washing the clothes,

and i am I have in this job, and i have related to this, i can manage it.

I am available for this job from 9am to During these hours i can perform my duty and i need two off Saturday and Sunday. this job so kindly inform me therefore i can this start this job from next summer.

I am from you.

Munnaza Shafique

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 5.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points and maintains a generally suitable purpose and tone, which is its strongest aspect. However, frequent errors in spelling, capitalisation, and grammar, together with limited vocabulary and underdeveloped detail, often distract the reader and weaken the overall impression.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Achievement

5.5

The letter covers all three bullet points, including availability from 9am to 5pm with weekends off, but the reasons for wanting the work and the offers of help are briefly and vaguely developed, and slips such as 'IF u' disrupt the formal register.

Coherence and Cohesion

5.5

Ideas are arranged in a plausible bullet-by-bullet order with some linking devices, but progression is mechanical and cohesion breaks down at points such as 'kindly inform me therefore i can this start this job'.

Lexical Resource

5.0

Vocabulary is adequate for the message but repetitive and sometimes imprecise, with phrases like 'all types of work' repeated, and misspellings such as 'experties' and 'Barrete'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.0

A mix of simple and some complex structures is attempted, but frequent errors in verb forms, capitalisation, and phrasing, such as 'searching of new job' and 'looking forward your hearing', reduce accuracy and readability.

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