Dear Samuel, I hope you are doing . I am writing to inform you about a place I had been to for the first time and the experience is overwhelming. I would like to take you there and show you how this part of the city is different from the rest. Recently, I, along with a group of people, visited a slum area as part of social activity. This slum is situated in a distant place, away from the city outskirts and could be reached on foot only. Upon entering the area, I was surprised by the children who were ready to welcome us; they were eagerly something for them to eat. We spent about 4 hours playing games, explained to them the importance of personal hygiene, taught them few important social aspects, gave them food which we took along with us and at the end of the session we distributed around 30 winter blankets for each family in the slum. When we were in the midst of the slum, I personally saw and felt their poverty, their longing for help and their need for social awareness. When we were leaving, I was so happy to see the smiles on their faces. The trip to the slum infused me with an idea to gather a few more and ask them for their help in supporting the slum dwellers. I know that you are very much interested in these types of philanthropic activities. If you agree, we can visit there next week and help them in any way possible. Yours truly, Prasad
Letter to a Friend About an Impressive Place
You recently visited a place that had a strong impact on you. Now you want to write to your friend about the place. Write a letter to a friend about the place. In your letter: - explain where the place was and how you got there - describe what you saw - offer to take your friend there
Annotated response
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Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter describes the location, access on foot, experiences and invitation with developed detail and a personal tone. Its chronological sequence is understandable, but the whole letter is presented in one paragraph. Some awkward phrasing and the construction "waiting that someone would bring" reduce precision and naturalness.
IELTS criteria
How each score was decided
Task Achievement
7.0The letter clearly covers all three bullet points, explaining the location and how it was reached, describing what was seen, and offering to take the friend there, with a consistently friendly tone and relevant developed detail.
Coherence and Cohesion
6.0The letter progresses clearly from the visit and its impact to an invitation. However, it is one continuous paragraph, including the greeting and closing, and some long sequences of activities would be easier to follow if grouped into separate paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
7.0Vocabulary has sufficient range for the personal account, including "personal hygiene" and "philanthropic activities". Some expressions are less natural or precise, such as "doing excellent" in the opening and the vague reference to "social aspects", but the intended meaning is clear.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
7.0A range of simple and complex sentences is used with generally good control. The sequence of past-tense verbs describing the activities is grammatical, but "waiting that someone would bring" uses an unsuitable complement after "waiting" and should be restructured.